|Reviews for Fallen|
| The Full Neko Alchemist chapter 1 . 8/4/2006
I'm glad you started to put this up here. I know it means a lot to get a review and I like the way you do this prologue. It has lots of detail to flesh out the myth of this world and reads nicely,
| Whisper of Death chapter 1 . 7/26/2006
I hope you will update soon...
| LuckyLadybug chapter 1 . 7/23/2006
This is a very intriguing beginning. The legends you've woven about the start of the planet and the players involved looks quite original to me. It shows that you are a masterful storyteller. You've paid attention to detail and make sure to explain things well. And the characters seem well-rounded and fascinating, especially Grigori.
There are some grammatic errors here and there. The line that says They were created for the soul purpose, should say SOLE purpose. And near the end, where it says about the textbook in it's mind (referring to the child), that should be its. Also, there's a couple of places where words run together, such as Fallenwere and Fallenhumanity.