Reviews for Inadequate |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Wow. This brings back a lot of old memories. The words are beautifully intertwined. Each one relates to one another. I can tell that you must have input a lot of emotion into your writing. Great job. |
![]() ![]() ![]() hey! it's your first day! congrats on joining. it's short and sweet. it's like a stream of consciousness poem, but i like it. love it when it's up for interpretation. cheers! in loving memory of Jack |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is nothing but pure angst. It's not wrong to write angst, but there should be a focus to every poem. What are you angsting about? What do you want your readers and your self to learn from this present angst? You can't just write a bunch of words and tell people to come to their own conclusions about it. It's perfectly fine if they DO come to their own conclusions, but you should really have a meaning that you would prefer them to come away with. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love the flow and the short lines. it's awesome. 'Kiss passion Wipe a tear Ignore your pain Fear rejection' I love those lines ~dragonzz~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() i love this. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think the short lines in this piece add to the impact, and the end punctuates it very well. Keep it up. |