Reviews for Element Gems
Charming Dice chapter 1 . 7/29/2006
Honestly, I have to say it can use a little work, but it's a pretty good story idea to run with. The element idea is a bit overdone, but you've managed to throw it into pretty good story.

You may wanna be careful not to overuse commas (like in paragraph 2 mostly). Also, elipsis should be three dots (...), unless it's at the end of a sentence with a period (...).

I hope that helps. After the three day waiting period this site has, I'll put my stories up so you can constructively shoot down my work. Feel free to fire away.

Best of luck!
Kari Mezmaru chapter 1 . 7/29/2006
Catchy, I'm interested. Please update!
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