I've always wanted to say that "I'm the one he writes songs about". I love the way you describe this boy, you make him sound and feel so real to the point that I wish I could know him now. The wistfulness of this puts a sad smile on my face because it's beautiful. Take care.

and i wish i could point out what i LURVE about this

but i'd be on and on forever.

and noody wants that, now.

This is my favorite poem I've read today. I can relate to this so much. It's actually brought tears to my eyes. Favoritesfavoritesfavorites.

The last stanza had me kind of whimpering to myself... that hope is mine, too. I guess a lot of girls feel like that, hmm?

"He wants to coax a new name for perfection out of guitar strings" Prettyprettyperfect.

"in the not so far off future, and be able to say ‘that one’s about me.’" Beautiful.

"he’s faciant/ed(ing)" Love it.

This is going to be reverberating through my head all day, I can feel it. I love it to pieces. Never stop writing. I will be back to read more of your work.

I like the concept of this poem, and I like the formatting in the first stanza, what you did with the word "rockstar." There are a few typos/things I was confused about, though.

"and hear his name praises by thousands" - "praised"

"in the not so far off future," - I don't think you need this line at all, since you say, "maybe one day" before that

"when he get lost rhythmic hooks and melodies-/he’s faciant/ed(ing)." - These two lines confused the hell out of me. I have no idea what you were trying to say..that last word, I don't even know what word it's supposed to be.

"deep inside that I know that one day" - you don't need the second "that"

If you made those few changes, I'm sure this would be a wonderful piece. As it is, it's alright, but needs some tweaking. Keep writing! :)

I love this! awesome the whole way.

Not boring or ordinairy at all, *this* rocked.

Keep writing.

i like that! and of course id remember you if i sumhow became a star. i mean, damn, u mean WAY more to me than becoming a rockstar! and besides, how could i forget what most of my songs are about?

hell nik, we'll be with them both. they promised me that i'll always be with them and travel all around and fuck, if i go you're sure as hell going! :]

Format is brilliant; the flow is amazing; I think I love you(r poetry).

No, seriously. I adore your poetry and I am just as close to obsessivly reading this as I've done everything I've loved; its pretty and gritty and glamour pretty-ugly and just pure amazing.

Love it, totally.

~* Noelle

Great write, love the format and the flow.

(because we all know romance and rebellion are fodder of the musical elite.)

I love that line! Actually, I love this whole poem. For some reason, it really hits me hard... faves