Very well done. It's very simple, flows nicely, and gets straight to the point. Nice to have a story that doesn't slosh its way through winding explenations (not that mine don't). -Mad

p.s. I've added you to my favorite author list. please R&R my stories

Very intresting. I will await your next update eagerly.

However, maybe you could not use so many eclipses? (...) With them after every few sentances it slightly pulls the reader out of your story and into reality (which is bad).

Also, when a new person is talking ("I am sent of a great sorcerer, to aid the people of this land in the fight against the dark. What would you have of me?” “And you also are a sorcerer?") You should put an enter in.

For example: "I am sent of a great sorcerer, to aid the people of this land in the fight against the dark. What would you have of me?” “And you also are a sorcerer?”"Yes."