Reviews for Alice
Phoenix Incarnate chapter 1 . 2/10/2013
Alice is sdying
Extra S there
That was creepy.
I love it!
NinjaxSketcheartx chapter 1 . 1/24/2013
I wonder why you put Alice is dying. Is it because she is living a life that isn't fit?

Otherwise, I really liked reading this. And I can pretty much relate to how Alice feels.
brown-eyed-writer chapter 1 . 2/26/2012
Love this. Creative and wonderful. Alice is dying; nice.
Ravenbird chapter 1 . 7/13/2011
Alice is dying. Clever.
MariellaSpeaks chapter 1 . 7/8/2011
I think the simple rhyme and meter added to the impact of this poem. I particularly liked the line, "Her heart has rotted in her chest," and though I'm not usually one for gimmicks like a hidden message, I thought in this case it was subtle and added to the value to the poem. Good work - I'm looking forward to reading the rest of your poetry.
Lifeshade chapter 1 . 1/29/2011
This poem is very intense/beautiful/meaningful. I love the rhyme, the figurative language, and the imagery. It all adds to the reality of the poem. :)
RawrEllieMayMightBeADinosaur chapter 1 . 6/21/2009
This was tragic, in an almost exciting way. Odd, yes?

It was brilliant how you used the bolding of "Alice is dying."

That simple act really made this one of a kind, bravo.

Hmm. In the 4th line, you bolded two s's. I'm assuming that wasn't intentional.

"Broken glass, she’s left with nothing

but a broken dream, and some things

never change, her feet are bleeding-"

I think the repeating of broken was a little superfluous, you could've changed one of them into something else. Also, those lines seem a little off when compared to the rest of the piece. Those few things really destroy the flow.

-Love from the Review Marathon, the link's in my page.
meghan22513 chapter 1 . 2/26/2009
thats brilliant
stolen hugs chapter 1 . 11/29/2008
amazing. I love what you did whith the bold text, though I think you have an extra "s" in line four.
Helpless-Dreamer01 chapter 1 . 10/7/2007
This is a really awesome poem and i highly commend you on it. I also managed to see the Alice Is Dying part... thats pretty cool... Well Done!

Catch, Dani
Wylloa chapter 1 . 2/6/2007
alice is dying. Your cover is gone. Where to turn to when even yourself deserts you? A beautiful poem. My all time favorite. Must show to My Vampire.
Tell Me Tall Tales chapter 1 . 11/29/2006
Fucking Awesome. That's not much good as a review, but man, that's just fucking awesome.
unuttered.thoughts chapter 1 . 10/29/2006
toward the middle it loses the good rythem it had... u can change the word choice and it may make it easyer to read...
lilyqueen777 chapter 1 . 10/20/2006
wow poor alice, and i hope im not the only one to notice the bolding letters spell out to your pen name?

adding to my c2 because this is wonderfully written and a unique poem!
Margot Tenenbaum chapter 1 . 9/24/2006
i love rich i love the fact that there's a rhyme to this, because frankly, i suck at rhyming. haha.
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