|Reviews for Simple Love|
| Nyleve Nalloc chapter 4 . 2/19/2008
I want to know too. Great chapter!
| Nyleve Nalloc chapter 3 . 2/18/2008
You strike me as the kind of writer who thinks faster than the speed of typing. Your story has nice visuals, and a lot of potential. I like the chemistry between Anna and Bryan. I also like how Bryan sounds a little different from other leading men on FP.
Now to the humble advice:
1. Breathe- you need to not run your thoughts so fast, so you don't skip words (it has happened to me.)
2. Pause- don't rush from one location to the other. Like the scene of her asking the lawyer to sign the paper and then rushing to the elevator scene... maybe a line break here and there?
I encourage you to keep writing... keep posting. Just be a bit careful with speed and you've got a winner.
I cannot wait to see what Anna is hiding.
| Katherine-the-greate chapter 1 . 2/17/2008
nice beginning. I like your metephores and discriptions. they are very immage invoking. there are a few minor grammar/spelling errors in your beginning paragraphs mostly and some later on. thanks for posting.