Reviews for Ashtray smile
the-foresight chapter 1 . 8/9/2006
I really liked that, sometimes I read a poem where I don't care about the meaning. I just read the imagery and enjoy the words. This is one of them, good work. The title alone is enough to make it great.
Kaye90 chapter 1 . 8/8/2006
WOW

image upon image

now my own green-grey jealous smoke is spewing. i've tried to write like this before, and could never make the images and word choices flow and incite the same feelings in a reader.

"ashtray smiles""perfect sour-cherry-jam-tart retorts""oh, shes smudged your cover, better go, gloss on another, but don't-, ah hell, light up another"

keep writing. never, ever stop.
Yahoska chapter 1 . 8/8/2006
this is really good... you're really good at being able to describe the feelings
lordelfy chapter 1 . 8/8/2006
kinda confusing but i understand most of it. Good job