|Reviews for Insolence|
| PocoSnow15 chapter 1 . 9/19/2006
Wow! The summary really pulled me in. Your last line was...amazing.
| Red Pen Writing chapter 1 . 8/9/2006
"The reasons are vaguemuch like the innocence of you"
Hmm...for some reason I see 'much like the innocence in you' working better. Innocence of you is worded a little awkwardly. Or you could go the rout of 'much like your innocence', which sounds even better in my opinion.
"I lie, I cheat, and I bleedto pierce my own numbness"
Love these lines. Just thought i'd point that out. xD very nicely worded.
"like a death of a million petals…"
I think 'like the death of..' sounds better. Just my opinion.
Other than that, it was great. :) I love your choice of words and the imagery you use. It's one of the better freeverse poems I've found so far.