|Reviews for Change|
| Rose ND chapter 1 . 8/31/2007
Fabulous and very realistic :))
Take care mate!
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 9/10/2006
I like this... well written and very true.. makes us think
| catseyeview chapter 1 . 8/29/2006
very strong piece! I apologize for my absence...rough time getting through the rest of doctorate. I hope to get back to writing for myself again and sharing here on fiction press. - Christine
| Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 8/14/2006
I like the very metaphorical beginning that you've created in this, and then how it dwindles down to just a ruff voice shouting. Wonderful work; I love your thought process, it makes perfect sense, and I completely agree. Keep up the good work.
| Jen calculates chapter 1 . 8/13/2006
Lovely imagery in the first verse. I don't know if you intended it, but you talk about politicians in the first verse and then the speaker ironically takes up a really patronising tone by the end. Interesting.
| the-foresight chapter 1 . 8/13/2006
Yeah, thatw as good, fantastic imagery with a real message. I liked the politicians line, because in a way, they do that. One criticism is that I think your lines are too short. Sometimes it works but in this case the poem is so good anyway it doesn't need it.