|Reviews for 16 years|
| Ds14 chapter 1 . 8/15/2006
T_T So beautiful ::tear::
| Smoky Bear chapter 1 . 8/15/2006
the concept is good, but spoiled by the fact that the poem is too long and there is a lot of word wastage. it's worth having a look at it and perhaps taking out some of the 'filler' words (I, of etc) and rephrasing some lines so that the sounds of the poem fit togther effectively. definately worth a redraft, as aforementioned - the concept is good.