it's

it's

pretty.

and...a little gritty at the same time.

i love it, though. 3

It isn't cohesive but it is beautiful. I like the way that each line seems to be a random memory and they are all strung together in a way that makes ... I am not very cohesive this evening.

I like it. I like the line, "cuddle in a homemade thought"

When you crazy NW spammers write something beautiful I am able to find you less annoying.

Cheers.

"careful smooth visageformulating broken slivers"

'Formulating' just seems inappropriate for the mood. It's a very iffy word, sense so far the poem has has a, hm, personal, simplistic feel.

Other than that, I loved it.

-Kikil

Sinewy. This was god. srsly it was /good/. Keep writing some more please! Review back

~Frodo

O, this is gorgeous. I love the last stanza best. The whole flow of it and the feeling was amazing and made me forget that it's 5:16 in the morning and I haven't been to sleep yet.