|Reviews for Dawning of the Day|
| Talerce chapter 1 . 8/17/2006
Not a bad little oneshot. Or story, if you decide to continue it. You had some nicing pacing and atmosphere in it. It made it...enticing.
Of course, there are some flaws. There are a lot of typos and inconsistancies with the subject tenses. And while the master/slave thing isn't bad, it is a bit thick when placed with the other things. At the start, the mindset of the girl and the way she maneuvers around to please him is good, but when he wakes it seems just a tad bit too much.
Anyways, it is a good quick read.