|Reviews for The Unspoken :: a short story|
| Aimers chapter 1 . 11/30/2006
This is absolutely gorgeous writing. You have metaphors in here that I would never be able to create. "violent hurricanes in her heart", ugh, I love it.
Keep on writing.
| Clairvoyant chapter 1 . 10/28/2006
It's exquisite, maybellie! I love it to pieces.
You'd better submit it...or else. (haha, I sound so threatening.) Well, if you don't submit it, I just might be temped to print it right off this page and submit it for you.
Cheerio - Swirley
| ShadowFane chapter 1 . 8/16/2006
Wow. I actually had tears in my eyes after reading this one. A most wonderful read.
| Frore chapter 1 . 8/16/2006
Excellent story! The imagery was very nice, and you portrayed the interwoven emotions very well. Favorited.
| Vanyawen chapter 1 . 8/16/2006
I loved it to death, read it twice.
If I had to find something to critique, perhaps provide a clue, even a subtle one, as to why "the stars are against" them. It sort of seems more like a plot device then an actual event.
| Eyeofhora chapter 1 . 8/16/2006
Nice! I love your description! Write some mroe!