i like it! very nice job. i like the title a lot by the way. thanks so much for reviewing my story, too.

keep going!

I like this, a lot! I hope you keep writing it... *forgot to check the last updated date*

So another step foward to the story. It's getting more intresting!

Nice beginning...Intriguing characters... You painted some nice visual images in the scenes at the party...like the lighting and the way the narrator's obsession arranged his legs. I liked the humor that broke through at the end too.

nice bright eyes refrence in the last line.

good start!

Utterly fantastic. This was written extremely well, and it has me really interested. It has a big sense of realism in it, which is great. Don't let lack of reviews discourage you, because I will obsessively be watching this story for updates.

This story sounds very intresting. I would like to know what else happens.