|Reviews for The Sky|
| antigonelives chapter 1 . 6/5/2007
I love the idea behind this and the way you wrote this, but I'd suggest rereading your work before posting, if you don't do so already.
"The sky hasn't awaken" - should be "awakened/wakened" because you've used "has not."
In the second to last line, that should be "it's" sans capitalisation.
Other than that, good.
| arethesemyfeet chapter 1 . 8/16/2006
i really liked this and i thought the darling made it seem sad like she was sick or something but hey maybe thats just me. well done
| The Postscript chapter 1 . 8/16/2006
I enjoyed the style of the piece as well but feel the ''Cause' and 'Darling' make it messy. Try not to use contractions as you did with 'you're' and 'you've' - spell it out. Vivid language, however. Wonderful work. Keep writing, s.
| rira-chan chapter 1 . 8/16/2006
_ this one reminds me of an anime i watch. _ thats uber cool.
| the-foresight chapter 1 . 8/16/2006
I really liked that, the whole style of the piece and your use of metaphor throughout. I loved the last two lines as well. Made for a suibtable ending, the "darling" also made it seem quite sarcastic but I don't know if that's what you wanted.