Reviews for Foolish Fire
Call me Mars chapter 3 . 4/3/2007
Oh my! You never updated this story! ;_;

It's so good! I wish I could send you, right now, 25 reviews! This story is worth THOUSANDS of them!

Oh, please update soon!
icedfaerie chapter 3 . 9/8/2006
Great story you have here! I really like the plot and the characters, especially Charlotte! I seriously can't wait until the next chapter.
V de V chapter 3 . 9/1/2006
Okay, I am back. This chapter is better. I think you are trying to limit the PhD-type language. I recognize that. But the plot is a bit slow. I suspect it is going somewhere with Sharlet and Nick ... Fine.

And .. concerning those books set in the 1790s, I can not imagine they are well researched in regard to people's names. I still feel they are out of place. But whatever. I will confess, however, I had some trouble with a guy I liked named Gabriel and involuntarily flinch whenever I see the word in print. Hahaha. But keep the names intact if you insist.
Iron Pyrate chapter 3 . 9/1/2006
This story *is* a bit harder to read because of the many large words, but everyone behaves so Properly that it shouldn't be written any differently. I love this story idea, it's kind of like a mix of The Taming of the Shrew and Pride and Prejudice with a dash of the Royal Navy. Cool! :-D
Angelic Brunette Hermione chapter 3 . 8/31/2006
It amazes me how Charlotte's parents seem to lack a restraint on her. I'm also surprised that they haven't forced her into marriage yet.

But, I do love the scenes with witty Charlotte and helpless Nicholas!

ABH
Michelle Habibi chapter 3 . 8/30/2006
good, good, good! i really do like this story so i hope you update soon!

-Michelle Habibi
Michelle Habibi chapter 2 . 8/26/2006
oh i wish charlotte had slapped nicholas or something but that, i think would've been too much. please update soon, i can't wait!

-Michelle Habibi
Ariana chapter 2 . 8/24/2006
I LOVE the second chapter! I can't wait for the next. I also really like your style of writing. I have not yet mastered (sufficiently anyway,) the "art" of 'Walking and Chewing Gum'. You connect your dialogue with your actions well. It flows. :)
Angelic Brunette Hermione chapter 2 . 8/24/2006
I'm really starting to L-O-V-E this story! I appreciate the toning-down on the vocab; not that I mind seeing advanced word-usage, of course . . .

ABH
V de V chapter 2 . 8/24/2006
Ugh, this is very tedious to read. Your choice of vocabulary hints at the naive writer who tries to impress the reader with language that is more complicated than it needs to be. It is not a matter of context clues to bring out the meanings of the said "hard" words, but a matter of style. You are not an Auston or a Dickens yet, so please do not try to pull it off with highfalutin language. You should try to be more concise and select easily-recognized synonyms to avoid repetition. Develop your characters instead of showing off how good your verbal skills are.

Also, put more history into this story. Do some research about the time period. I am already finding historical inaccuracies. Your piece takes place in Napoleonic France, right? Then why do your characters have biblical names? After the French Revolution, names like Gabriel and Isaac, were abandoned for the names of Roman heroes (Cornelia, Horatius, Tiberius) flowers (Hyacinth, Helianth, etc), and revolutionaries (Maximilian and his colleagues) ... So there is scope for much improvement.
Madison L chapter 2 . 8/23/2006
Oh, they're all so marvellously blunt! Of course, the stubborn blue-stocking character is becoming (sadly) stock these days, but you portray Charlotte with a certain freshness, most reviving.

I happen to find your use of language not only acceptable in it's variations, but suited and typical to the period in which you are writing. It suits the story well, and you've got fairly good mastery of it. Can't wait to read more.
Ariana chapter 1 . 8/17/2006
This is great Jackaroe! But, I also think your story would do just fine without the all "Sesquipedalianism." :)

Not that lengthy words aren't okay to use (if they're what you need to express yourself clearly,) but for readers who don't have as wide of a vocabulary as you do, seeing words like expostulations, ripostes , senescent, etc, might leave the reader feeling a little alienated.
Angelic Brunette Hermione chapter 1 . 8/16/2006
Can't complain so far:

Spelling/Grammar and vocab. are is , you've got the wow factor.

I'm curious to see how this turns out!

ABH