Hey great story - update soon!

A tip for homesickness - listen to your favourite music and belt out the lyrics - works a treat!

nice

There doesn't seem to be any sort of plot here at all, or if there is, it's going nowhere fast. Someone needs to slap Delaney/Ace/Duke across the face because she's being a whiney little bitch. Absolutely zero character development has been made in 15 chapters. All that's happened is Delaney screaming at her inner self for thinking she likes the rich and arrogant Teigan (who really isn't bad at all). She looks like a freaking Mary Sue, and she's a bitch (not in a cool way either). The characters are all flat, one-dimensional, and utterly predictable. I'd say to scrap this and rewrite, but there really is no actual story besides Delaney/Ace/Duke's sort of feelings for Teigan that we knew were there from chapter numero uno. And that's it. It's not funny or original either which might have been able to save the fact that it has a lack-luster plot. Boring, predictable, and cliched (not in a good way). This story has been done a thousand and one times. Don't waste your time by writing this- do something more productive. If you want to be a writer, wait for an original idea and take the time to map out a plot. It might take a little longer then what you're used to with this story, but it'll be worth it. I mean come on, you're 18. I shouldn't have to be telling you this.

And yes, I guess this could be perceived as a flame, but I like to think of it as really harsh criticism. Hopefully this'll serve as an eye-opener because despite all that I've said, I can see that you have talent. Don't waste your time on this drivel.

Oh, nice! And interesting...and Kevin is really weird lol

update soon!

~Mia

I stand self-corrected. I have no time to properly review /this/ chapter. My bad. Still like it. You're a good writer. Be proud, writer-man! It's not gender-specific so if you're feeling insulted don't be. XD Sorry im super insenstive.

his is awesome! I have no time to keep reading/properly review this chapter, but i love it! Toodles! Expect more reviews later.

- Self-Diagnosed ADD

I'm starting to get a little frustrated that Delaney can't accept what she's being given..after 15 chapters I think you should start pushing them a little closer

as for being homesick...get a webcam, surround yourself with lots of pictures, make new friends to take your mind off home and start planning the trip home )

She;s gonna die! WHat's so wrong eith Tiegan? UPDDATE!

when is she gonna admit her feelings

Yes! They are back together. That's just... awesomeness right there. And the chemistry between Duke and Teigan is heating up. I like it.

I also cannot wait to see what her brothers have up their sleeves. I know something has gotta happen. The suspense is... very suspenseful! (I know, for a writer, I have a very extensive vocabulary, right?)

Lots of love and keep writing.

please update soon!

i loved it :)

I LOVE this story! I really want to see her brother's reactions to Teigan's explanation to were Duke slept the previous night.

yay they did it they got tham back and i see is going to get more crazy cuz her brothers are there

lol funny, her older brothers don't like him much

Woot! Another chapter. Great work. Please update soon!