Reviews for Innocent
soliloquist chapter 1 . 4/19/2007
It made me cry. It is a very powerful piece of writing. The images, the repeated motifs, everything- perfect.

Often it is difficult to tell if 'you' is the priest or the brother. And instinctual, at the start of teh final segment, is not a word. You should have used instinctive.

Thanks for the opportunity to read such a great piece of writing.
mobman chapter 1 . 2/10/2007
im in shock, and there are chills that wont go away in my spine. If thats wha you were hoping for, you nailed it. Great job
Aleksis chapter 1 . 10/19/2006
OH MY GOD.

Seriously, such a beautiful piece. It's really evocative, and sad, and witty. Beautiful description, wonderful writing (especially the passage about the slippery vine). And I must admit that the rabid sexist in me assumed that the narrative voice was male. I've got to fix that sometime...

But, like, 10/10. Fabulous. :)