Reviews for air
lookingwest chapter 1 . 8/24/2006
great concept! nice imagery.
msdewey chapter 1 . 8/22/2006
This isn't bad - the idea of it is really great, but it gets sort of silly in the middle. And the last line is off somehow too. I do like the first 4 lines really well - and the Why look so surprised, when I decide I'll go breathe someone else's air in - I really like that part... maybe rework this? Keep writing!
All Alone With Her Thoughts chapter 1 . 8/20/2006
Intresting idea, but don't really flow well. I would change some of the words so it would read