Reviews for Predator
Ember Black chapter 24 . 1/1/2010
a faq would be nice...i'm still a little confused on who's who with the whole predator and stuff names thing. and what was cancer trying to do? i mean, what was his plan? But I loved the story _

And I hope you don't leave fictionpress.
bfoundwanting chapter 24 . 1/1/2010
I've been reading this story since the beginning and I have always liked it, though sometimes been confused. I was excited when I read in the beginning that you said this would answer questions because I had so many. And in a way it did answer questions because you see the interaction between Scythe and Raythe and Cancer more clearly. But the ending just confused the hell out of me, to be honest. I have no clue what is going on. Cancer is supposed to be ruining Angelas life because of what she did to Scythes/Raythes father. I don't really understand why he wants to do that but even so the ending sounds like he wont. He burns his journal and takes her hand. What does that mean? Basically. I have ALWAYS loved your writing style and the complexity of your characters and story... but could you give me a short synopsis of what actually happened? I know that sounds bad, but I think its just because I read everything so far apart? Or Im just not good at picking up clues. Anyways, I would really appreciate it.

Also, I suggest that you write the new story. Again, I have always loved your stories, writing style and characters. Good job on finishing predator!
superficialowl chapter 24 . 12/31/2009
Omg it is finally the end! I am in shock since I saw none of that coming and I will now have to read it all again. I do have a question though, why did Scythe try to rape Angela?

I am glad to hear that you are staying on FP for a bit since there is not enough good stories on here. I also hope that your new story has a few psychotic characters since you write them very well.
LIPS - chapter 24 . 12/31/2009
First of all, I just wanted to thank you for writing the best story that I've ever read in my entire life. From the characters to your writing style, everything was absolutely superb. I spent most of the time, as I read this, either smiling at your genius or silently cursing you because I'm insanely jealous of your talent.

I love how everything came together so well at the end. It fit together so perfectly, everything did. The last chapter (.after) really just opened my eyes to the meaning of every single scene in the story. I still can't believe that you concocted such a wonderful story. It was so intricate and complicated with so many layers of intrigue and symbolism that it's amazing you managed to explain everything so concisely at the end. If I'd attempted a story like this, I'd end up with a huge mess on my hands.

The characters were so realistic and believable, it was scary. There's something freaky about stories like this one. Stories that can get you so scared without having to incorporate zombies or demons. I suppose the scariest thing about this story is that there's always the slightest possibility that it could happen in real life. You, my dear, are a master at psychological horror. Stephen King wishes he had your talent.

Your prose is both breathtaking and mesmerizing. You have a way of describing things that is just... wow. (Sorry, I'm running out of adjectives here.) You must really have an amazing mind in order to come up with the descriptions, analogies, and metaphors that your story is filled with.

I've never read a story like this before. I've also never been so happy while being so confused at the same time. I've been following this story over the past year and half or so and every time I saw an update, my heart would literally skip a beat. It's sad that it's over, but it had to happen eventually, and the ending that you gave it felt just so perfect.

I'm sorry that I can't give any advice as to which three chapters to send. I loved them all; each one was amazing. But I think you'd do fine just sending the first three. When you get published, make sure to let us know so that we can purchase a copy.

I do have a couple questions, though:

1. How did you get the idea for this story? Was there something in particular that inspired you? If so, what was it? Did you come up with the plot all at once or did you slowly develop it over time?

2. Did/does Cancer actually have real feelings for Angela?

3. Why did Scythe's dad leave him in the car in the water with all the rats? I mean, where did the rats come from? If you already clarified this, my apologies, but I don't remember any explanation being provided for this.

4. Do you read lots of horror/suspense/psychological horror books? Because I get the feeling that you're the sort of person that probably doesn't, and yet you're still a genius at writing them.

5. Why are you so awesome?

Personally, I would love it if you concentrated on Euphoria. What you've already posted of it is completely amazing and I really can't wait to read more of it. But whether you decide to work on that, or also put time into your other story (Thieves of Samurett), I'm fine with it, because really, just having the opportunity your work is such an honor.

Um, okay. I'm sorry this review is so long. I just wanted to get everything out. So... yeah. I'm sorry for wasting your time with this lengthy review, but I'm all out of sorts right now and emotional after reading these final chapters. Like I said, it's the best story I've ever had the pleasure of reading. You're absolutely amazing for being able to come up with something like this, let alone execute it with such perfection. Thank you so much for sharing this story with us. I can't wait to read more of your work.

Claes Winterspell chapter 24 . 12/31/2009
whoa... you really know how to end your stories ! O.O *stares at the last line*

All this time I've always thought Cancer was the Consumer and Scythe was the Predator... hello, wake up call. And talk about a New Year's gift! I literally read this at the stroke of midnight, Jan. 1, 2010. haha. And don't worry about my confused comment; it's from my long separation from the story. I'll reread the story and I'll understand everything all over again. Shucks, I should've known Cancer was to perfectly timed. *grumblegrumble* What I don't get is why he wants Angela; I mean, does all he want is revenge? If so, why would he want her at all and why keep her after? *ponders* Man, I bet if he didn't burn that journal tons of fangirls would've haunted along that beach and hunted for it; maybe they'd get the scattered ashes. Somehow, Angela seems more reserved to me in this chapter; is it because of Cancer? Or the scare/trauma? Anyway she's changed, in a way. So, basically, Rayth's a good guy? He just ended up choosing the wrong moves and tried to fix things the wrong way. Goodness, these boys need to get a psychiatrist of their own; but I bet they'd just end up messing the shrink's brain up. Anyway, I'm rambling. Awesome chapter, Great story. Phenomenal characters; really, they're what make you story work, mostly. Fantastic job! *rocket thumbs up*

-Claes Winterspell

P.S. Makes me feel sad this might be my last comment for this story O.O

P.P.S. Might I ask, who/what influenced you to write? And what do you think of Edgar Allan Poe?
midnightxskiesxx chapter 24 . 12/31/2009
soo, does cancer actually love angela? and does angela know about any of it?/his plan?
The Solipsistic chapter 24 . 12/30/2009
I've been reading this since you started posting it, and only reviewed untill now.

I think it's time for a reread, but still I loved it.

Please continue your writing.

It's nothing like everything else posted and it's nice to see that.
layne chapter 24 . 12/30/2009
so I'm still pretty much entirely confused. you went so long without updating that it's hard to remember all of the plot details without going back and re reading the entire story, so could you perhaps post an epilogue or a synopsis of sorts to explain the conclusion and story to those of us who don't get it?
waterlilies52 chapter 8 . 12/30/2009
oh LOL I just realized that I meant "Scythe" instead of Rayth in my other review rofl. but this chapter was pretty..intense. I get the feeling that Scythe was good. But then, I suppose all of them were good one way or another. Man the more I read this, the more I appreciate your genius.
waterlilies52 chapter 6 . 12/30/2009
wow, so now I'm thinking that the role of Predator changed. because at the end of this chapter it sounds as if Raythe is since "he's always the one in charge."
waterlilies52 chapter 24 . 12/30/2009
oh my god. I get it. I finally get it. oh my goodness this story was genius. I didn't realize before, thought it was just a mess of events...but now I see. wow. Time to re-read this.
Scribblesandink chapter 24 . 12/30/2009
Thanks for posting the story! I enjoyed reading it- good luck with querying!
scattered-strings chapter 24 . 12/30/2009
I'm kind of confused. I kind of suspected that Cancer was the predator but what were his intentions with Angela, apart from breaking the twins.

Sometimes, I think Cancer actually likes Angela but sometimes, I think he's just treating her like a tool and then in the end, he's going to kill her.

You should totally send the Bones scene to the agents or when she finds out Lynn is dead.

Please do the new story. )
mistariapotter chapter 24 . 12/30/2009
Dances-With-Pen chapter 24 . 12/30/2009
lol Even in the end you still leave everything in mystery. lol This story was very challenging to read and in a good way. I love how original and mysterious it is. The ending, I'm assuming Scythe went to jail, but what happened to his brother. Now, Cancer, i don't get him. Sometimes I feel he's using her, then cares for her, but in the last chapter, it felt like he was going to kill her. Poor Angela.
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