Who are they? And how will Scythe react to Cancer, and the fact that no only does Angela seem to like him, she didnt tell him about him?

She's reading the diary of Cancer's mother, ain't she, or or Scythe's mother who used to be friends with Cancer's mom until...pum pum pum she was bitten...

The predator, I have no idea, it one of the twins, that's my conclusion, I think their family's part of a werewolf hunting cult or something, I don't know i just get that vibe...

I'm starting like Angel a little, after the whole goody two shoes thing started to wear off, the random things she says, and her random bouts of hyperness kind of reminds me of myself...

Scythe's and Angel's relationship is kind of unhealthy, he seems like the type of boyfriend who would abuse g/f and feel bad but still does it cuz he has anger management issues...

and ultimately Scythe has no friends at all because if no one has the guts to tell him off than there not really his friends, they're just scared of him...

yuppers,

tee hee, well until you write again

cheerio

I kind of just don't really understand the story at all. I've read something that's sort of similar on and someone described the writing as "film noir". I think you write in a film noir style, that's probably why I don't get it.

Good luck anyway.

-has babies-

look.

just look.

quadruplets.

and they all look mysteriously like you.

i'll just go slit my wrists now and bathe in my own blood shall i. shall i.

AH! I HATE CLIFFHANGERS! lol. Why must you do this to me? But wow, I had no idea he was grown up. O. He must be hot. Oh crap, what if Cancer is the Predator? Oh jeez. NO! lol. well, update soon!

hey ya fuzzy piece of moldy cow shit. hahaa just kidding. I sound like a bully, and I don’t want that to be my life, homie. I just don’t. I keep spelling don’t like this: downt. jaheez. Im so cool. it’s ridiculous.

“Above me, my fan circled.” no it fucking didn’t.

I thought this one sentence said: “Now I vatched them, midnight blue.” I was like, wtf, transvlaniaia. My aunt fanny.

peace.

we’ve never had an angel on top of our christmas tree. cept one time. it’s usually a star. you know. the star the three wise men followed, and then ate chopsticks. wait, you don’t eat those things. -fool-

what’s up with the little girl. I’ve got a song in my head. it goes: it’s in tha wahtar baby. it only goes like that on saturday’s though. HUSH. thats tomorrow. today for you. for you. and only you. loner.

the scene with scythe and the door and the window and the outside and the cold and the wee was pretty hot, man. especially his STRANGLED EXPRESSION hahahahah. Likehe’sdying. Hold on, I must write a poem about it. here it goes:

THE MASTERPIECE

strangle

the end.

what’s a ravish? what a dumb ass. HAHAA. Okay -calm-.

Okay. I have to say that I adored the wall scene. it was amusing and written real well. like oatmeal.

I wonder. I wonder. I wonder what’s up. I wonder what’s up with the game. I wonder. -wonder-

cancer. yo ass is sexy

and thanks for the vocab lesson, babes.

okay so I have a dilemma. I don’t know who I want to eat. scythe, or cancer?

-ponder-

k i just read my review over, and thank god i did because at first my words weren't words. they were like dsf and hwegrweyr and a little bit o' ehfuetea123. it was weird as hell.

man o man am i ever tired.

ohh. AW. POOR MOMMA. six hundred plus blank pages. oh why. why. thats so sad. i feel so bad for her.

-pats back-

what is with scythe trying to romance her at the window. GJKDSsfsaklfds. tell him to back off because cancer is her man. especially. oh gawsh, ESPECIALLY after he cut her.

but that is so frickin sweet. he is being weirdly sweet. and he carried her. i know. lets pretend im angela and ur scythe. oh happyhappyjoyjoy.

WHATS A RAVISH. OH WHATS A RAVISH. -laughs head off- poor angela. i mean me. my way with words obviously did not work on yo dimwitted self, scythe. hawhaw.

oh. OH. girlie. thats what me and my friends do. HAHA. how alike we are. we dont use spray paint. we use permanent markers to graffiti. but its only mostly at the park. because i'd get in trouble if i did my wall.

aw. aw. this is like young blossoming love. an angel and a rabid werewolf. yes. yes this is what scythe is, no. WELL CANCER BETTER POP HIS ASS IN SOON. HE JUST BETTER.

oh joy! here he is. here! i see him! on his motorcycle! . cancer and scythe finally get to meet! oh naffi im so freekin excitedd.

UPDATE. update you panda loving dyke. go on and never stop.

-stamps feet-

awesome love it

WHAT IS GOING ON! I am so confused. Yet at the same time not so confused. I get what's going on with Scythe and Angel, but I don't understand what Cancer has to do with anything, or what the heck the parts with the predator and the Producer are. So I'm thouroughly confused. Please update again soon.

Oh. This was so long awaited. I missed this story so much.

Okay, acts like a very small child when around Scythe, an overdramatic girl around Raythe, and a semi normal person around everyone else. Who is she really?Why does Scythe hang out with her when she is so weird around him? How did they come to be friends?He obviously cares ALOT about her... but why? Does he just "care" for her, or does he like her more than a friend?

I am so interested to see how Scythe reacts to Cancer. I could see him getting jealous.. even if he doesn't "like like" her.

Whats with Raythe? Scythe is obviously in charge, but there is something slightly sinister about Raythe that makes it seem like he is more dominent when he really wants to be.

Are the Producer and the Predator Raythe and Scythe?

This chapter really developed the relationship between Angela and Scythe a bit more. I love how he calls her his angel, how much he obviously cares, and how he calls her babe, ect.

I hate the cliffie, and I'm excited for more plot movement. I feel like everything so far has just been the slow build up.

Amazing job as always! Sorry I havn't been reviewing as regularly. Hopefully I am back! Miss talking to you! You take forever to reply to dont take too long on this one, i cant wait for the next chapter!

At least you can play something on a gee-tar. Music is not my thing, heh. *sticks to writing*Nice chappy. Scythe was nicer in this one and was that nervousness *gasp* we saw? It's always like a competiton between him and Angela. And she's so optimistic and...bouncy. Raythe, I kinda sympathize with him, althoguh Scythe is totally better, since he always seems on the outside. Hm...Eleanor's journal sounds so proper...I'm tying to figure out if she plays an important role. It's gonna be kinda fun to see how Cancr and Scythe react with one another. Is it just me or is it foreshadowing that theyt're going to hate each other? :D. And once again, ending with the Predator...so puzzling...lol. Favorite lines:I left, hurried up the stairs, not bothering to inform her that six hundred and forty of her pages were completely sad but also kinda funny. We don't hear a lot about famili life so this was kinda nice. I'm really aanxious to se more about eh charrie's backgorunds but i'm sure that will come in time.“And all I need now,” I whispered into his ear. “Is a whip.”Rawr... pimples crinkled over flesh and I suppressed a shudderGoose pimples? I've always heard them as goosebumps, , I'm dying of thirst so I will stop babbling. xnonax

i havent read the story yet but it sounds good, i havent the time to read it now but ill read it as soon as i get more time :)

I just wanted to leave a review

Oh. So they're NOT going to kill Angel? But... Summary says "Angels fall to Hell", hence - dying. Oh wells. I'm going off Scythe, he's very mean. The whole cutting thing, and the way he always is so rude to everyone... It's just not nice.

oh i always forget:RAMADAN MUBARAK TO YOU TOO!

Hey!

So I’m kind of sporadically reading your stories, I don’t really have much time to read right now. Life’s so busy with school, homework, and sport. Gah, but you probably already know that right?

Anyways, it’s good so far. I’m really waiting for Cancer to show up again but I’m wondering if he’s the main character or not. Also, if he will be in the future, does Angela still remember that day? That encounter?

I was a little confused by this part. “Not that that was the reason I didn’t want ice-cream. Scythe knew it was more than that. This was his way of breaking a new found habit that he didn’t like.” What habit does he not like? I just didn’t understand the whole “new found habit” aspect of the paragraph in chapter 3.

Another thing is that you make your characters out to know every aspect of their friends. Like how Angela knows not to push Scythe and when he doesn’t want a question answered. I’m not sure if anyone is that close to a friend, unless their history is different from others’. What I want to see if how Angela, Raythe and Scythe met. How did they become such great friends? Was it always like that, them being such good friends? What school do they go to? Obviously it’s private but could you also focus a little more on the secondary aspects too. Like school, family, other friends? Also, what about the wealth of the twins? They seem pretty wealthy but I’m left guessing with only a chauffer and what seems like a large house but I’m not sure…..

“Don’t you find it fascinating,” his voice seemed to breath through air, almost become one with it. “The way that we’re probably surrounded by them; there are hundreds, thousands, millions around us; and we aren’t actually aware that they’re there? We just…don’t seem to notice them. Or we don’t look. Or we don’t want to look. The only reason we know is because of the statistic?”-foreshadowing? Interesting, Raythe seems like the thinker of the group. The so called nerd if you want to go that far but he’s definitely the antithesis of Scythe. Scythe on the other hand is impulsive, arrogant, and standoffish with mood swings too. Are the mood swings frequent or are they normal (ie something happened and now he feels like that)?

Okay Bones was really creepy. I assume that they kill the rat somehow? But what is the point of the game? I could be wrong on the killing part but Angela was most terrified so it has to be something big. Will you explain later on?

I’m still kind of preoccupied with Angela’s need to explain herself to Scythe? Why does she need to show him that she has no fear whatsoever? I understand the need to make yourself known, and to show that you’re not afraid to make the other person wrong, but the way Angela tries to be fearless is kind of creepy. She’s repressing her own emotions and instincts just so that she can show Scythe how good she is. And haven’t they know each other for a long time? Wouldn’t she have given up with the whole fear thing a long time a go?

Again, think about the outside world. Include the families, even if they are brief, but it seems like the twins’ mother is a part of their life even if it is negative. Maybe she affects their personalities? Elaborate on how whenever she enters the room they tense up and what not. Ask yourself why? Again, think autobiography.

Oh goodness Pinky and the Brain! My history teacher was just talking about that today. What a coincidence! Déjà vu.

What is sixth form? Is it some kind of school?

“When you see something like that often enough,” Rayth voiced my thoughts. “It loses impact and becomes part of the norm; you learn to accept it.” Again brilliance in a bottle

“We’re going up,” he instructed. “My mom wants me to clear out some stuff in the attic and you can help me, since you’re probably full of energy.”I wasn’t today, but he didn’t need to know that.-again what’s going on with Angela? It seems like she has no independence.

Props for incorporating Angela’s mom into the mix a little bit but I’d like to see more of her home life, does she ever go back to her home at the end of a school day?

“Go drown in your excretion.”-cool little fact. My art teacher always says that you should never swear, instead use SAT words. Example being “You urinate me off!” Instead of you piss me off…

Scythe said, fiddling with the lighter. On. Off. It was rhythmic.-any link to the whole italicized part at the end of the chapters?

Scythe wasn’t usually one to embrace work with no complaint. And was this some sort of challenge? If he could do it without complaint, why couldn’t I? By not helping out, it would make it obvious that I was tired, and I couldn’t let him, or anyone, catch onto that.-again Angela’s need to prove her worth? Does she only do that with Scythe or is that her personality? I just don’t understand her need to prove herself…

So over all it's pretty good. You have some nice plot going on but I'm really waiting for everything to stir up and get moving. I still feel like the characters are fictional in the sense that I can't relate to them and/or they just seem surreal. What about their own lives? How old are they? What kind of hobbies do they like? I read a lot good stories where the characters are mysterious like yours but still have that piece of realness to them. I'm not sure if you're understanding what I'm trying to say if so just let me know in your next review response. I'll be glad to explain.

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And darkness is fading in, and darkness is real

Oh my eyes oh closing slowly I try

Fate seems to recreate, I just cannot escape, Something holds me down and makes me act a way I can't explain Even now I can feel it coming over me choking me, as I'm falling behind You can say you know me, but you have no clue what my dreams could show you...

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