Werewolves, your story's about cute cuddly werewolves, and that boy (with the blonde hair) is an adorable lil werewolf, who called himself cancer because, he can SPREAD his disease, which is why he told her to leave...

AND he was in that house becuase, that night he would become a werewolf and his father had to put him somewhere far away from society, so ya know, kind of like Harry Potter,

and the boy's mother was a werewolf, that's why his father told him their mother went to hell...

so is my prediction-ay right?

hm? I hope not, I want it to be as surprise, but any vays great story love...(hah take that George Bush, muslim ppl are talented)

ure story's awesom as usual, I need to read ure other ones too..can't wait

update soon

i think...i think cancer's the "predator" and he's stalking angela. and the last bit right there is him asking the "consumer" to kidnap her?

i dunno. lol. i'm trying to figure it all out. am i at least warm? you should know how obsessed i am with your story. just like catharsis. except her ashes doesn't seem to catch my fancy, if you know what i mean. haha. lame. i dunno. i just don't like it.

predator is a lot more intriguing. the plot and everything...hopefully no one dies. except for...maybe pippa. no. no. i changed my mind. i want her to live too. her name is weird. i like that. but seriously, pippa? is that her real name? is it short for like...pipparina? haha.

yikes. scythe is a big meanie. but he's secretly in love with angela, tho, right? right?

haha. whatever. peace out, homes.

eep. Is Scythe a cannibal, or is that all part of him being a "predator"?

most of ur guy (well actually the ones i've come to read upon and love) characters are kinda the same. calm ,creepy,mysterious and very blunt...strangly i find that hot. ew. i just sounded like paris .hm. so what is the deal with the predetor...hm and who is the consumer...is angel the prey? ha. i sound like those narrators for those cheesy soap operas that leave a cliffhanger conclusion like:"will sofia find out the father of her child? will benjamin ever confront isabelle for her sinful deeds? will elizabeth ever discover her evil twin? stay tuned for the next episode to find out!"...yea one of those. so yea schools started and i gotta start on my . so update on all ur stories. bye.

ok wth? that end bit freaked me out. oh also 'bit, as to catch there attention' wrong use of there it should be their. angel was irritating me a bit too in this. ill go tlk 2 u *sigh*

This story has quickly climbed the lists and is now my favorite WIP. I like it intensely more than Her Ashes. No Offence.

These characters are so much deeper, so much more real. The plot is so interesting and intriguing. Everything is more complicated and nothing is straight forward.

At the begining of the story I thought Rayth would end up surprising everyone and be the one to drag angela down, however thats going to be done. But now I believe its Scythe. I think he loves angela, more thana friend but cant really love her while she is "a wimp". But thats just my thinkings so far.

Either way, or whatever way it goes, it is really good. This is going to be another amazing story, and while I enjoy Her Ashes.. that will just be a fic. This will be a good story. A real story and I am so excited to see where it goes! You really are so good at stories such as this!

i would like to begin by calling you a lazy ass. just like.. look online for lighthouse archituectgyytet (yknow.. that funky designy word). the internet is your friend.

i remember this poem i had to read last year in english, & it was about a lighthouse. & four men who lived there, & they mysteriously died. & there was like.. a few conclusions, such as they murdered eachother because they went mad from seclusion, or they all jumped into the sea & committed suicide like losers. & the last conclusion was that the ravens ate them.

just thought i'd share. the coolness.

anywho.

"A beeping sound and I was awake..." should be something like "A beep sounded and I was awake..." cuz.. well. you kinda have an incomplete fragment there. no, i don't know what i'm talking about, but i do at the same time. k. so just. k.

"haphazardly". very posh, mate.

i'm scrutinizing (i killed that word too..) your chapter because i skimmed the other one. so this review will be very, very detailed. -details-

& plus i'm going to bed right after so i can just chill as long as i want here. even though i neglected my studying & haven't printed out my microscope diagrams & all that shit.

ohk well i just decide to print out the diagrams. & while i was doing that, my dog decided his bladder was full & so im being DISTRACTED. omfg. leave me alone, fido.

I DONT HAVE COLOURED INK?

-murder-

k anyhow. im gonna ignore puppyhead until he threatens my life.

nevermind. he's actually whimpering.

-im giving you a play by play of my life-

...

k im back. & while i review i will also DRAW OUT THE DIAGRAMS. so if the review doesn't make sense, it's just cuz i'm an idiot.

well k nevermind that. i'll do the diagrams in the morning or during class.

MOVING ON.

“You’re heavy.” at first I thought he was calling her fat, but then I read on & I was like. OHSOHECARRIEDHERONCEUPONATIME. -understandifies-

what kind of cereal is scythe eating.. on a plate? my god. are you like.. an alien. I’ve never heard of half the things in your fics! haha. I feel so dumb. SO UNINFORMED. narrow mind. I can go deeper.

who falls asleep on a roof. like. wouldn’t you go a-rollin’ to yer doo-doo-doom. How careless. -sophisticated hair flip-

“So...” I waved my spoon about a bit, as if to catch there attention” —OMG. THE DREADED THERE. convertify into “their”. Would you like fries with that? (That would actually be your line. but I stole your thunder)

herbert. -the ultimate cringe- it’ll probably grow on me like some kinda unwanted fungi. actually it already kinda is.. not the fungi, that is. i mean the name.

scythe & angel’s lil tackle fest there was cute. except the fact that he.. rammed her head into the floor. like TAKE IT DOWN A NOTCH YOU.. (whisper) predator.

anthony’s an ohk name cuz it can be made into tony. which is like. hi im tony. the stud. maybe he got billy fired cuz billy molested him. who knows what your dark, perverse mind has thought up.

ze boys obviously have an icky relationship with their COLD as ICE momma. & she must not like angela. mebbe she knows angela will be playing her two sons in the future. she just knows.

I like how angela’s all dramatic. im surprised she’s not in drama, or something.

“‘Okay.’ I ran up to the kitchen door and posed in front of it dramatically. ‘Let’s go, boys,’ I coyly said.” HAHA. aw, cute.

lynn’s a freak. who rambles on about a freakin’ shirt? DON’T YEW LUV THA WAY I’VE DONE MAH EYELINER. haha. -pokesfun- I’m making fun of a fictional character. I feel so big, so bad.

it’s cute how even though angela’s all distracted & shiat, she still has a bounce in her step. so not one-dimensional. wee!

“‘I’m on office duty,’ he told him, prodding the bagde. He’d pinned it on the pocket of his blazer. The smilie face blared at me.” I don’t know why, but that made me laugh so freaking hard. & then a bug landed on my computer screen & I killed it with a pre-wash spray for your hair bottle, & the moment was over.

Lmao. Scythe’s awesome. I HEART HIM. beating up the office duty dude & locking him in a broom cupboard. broom cupboard. god you sound so british. can’t say why that is..

Taz just came inside. he was gone for six hours. what the eff..

is, uh. scythe a cannibal. -stony stare- haha. I heart him. heartheart.

wagging school? who says that. you & your slang. -pimpslap-

the vender was a freaky man. & how sweet of angel to give him the money, though I doubt he’d buy the ice cream for himself considering he was already freezing his unfortunate ass off.

hehehehehe. hehehehe. I like the talk of heaven & hell. does angela go to hell ‘cause (or with) him? & is the predator something like.. LUCIFER. the devil. i want devilled eggs.. haha.

is scythe bipolar. haha. I liked him at first, & I thought he was just having a mood-swing, but the mood-swing never ends! ee. he’s just an ass. ze lighthouse. is it actually an important part of the story? I’m guessing it is, cuz lighthouses are cool. maybe she falls from the light house for some unknown reason, dies, & goes to hell. during this lil dare. mwahaha.

-predict-

predator, consumer? what’s next. producer? decomposifierity? LOL. I feel like im in biology. I’VE GOT ENOUGH SCIENCE IN MY LIFE, KTHNX. -spaz- I want to know who ze predator is. NOW.

anywho. i just raped your review page, i hope you appreciate that. i spent a long time on this review..

now i sleep.

-sleep-

I'm so excited you updated. w Squee.

But my point is, I love the way you bring the idea of heaven and hell into it, seeing as it makes it really interesting. And the end parts, with the Predator and Consumer are squee worthy. They remind me a bit of Carthsis, so I'm physched.

Scythe is SO mean! lol. It's the whole bad boy/good girl, hell/heaven thing. Funny, I just noticed how much Angela reminds me of ME. I can be quirky and break into song for no apparent reason and it gets people annoyed.

So...anyway, my family's from Karachi. Do you know urdu? I'm pretty fluent at it. And I'm proud to say that!

UPDATE SOON

. . this story makes me squeal k. And YEAH. I know what that buchai huchai thing means. But I have to read it again because I forgot. But it sounds very familiar. Something like a badbad girl or somehting. Cuz Buchie or something means that I know. I KNOW, BEYTAH. Iknowit. dsgdsgfd

Scythe acted a little like Rayth in this one. Rayth is funny. Scythe was very angstangst and I liked him a lot better when he was all pippi. PIPPI. is she not his girlfriend? is she? is she? say it is so. say it. it makes everything more yummy. see. scythe has a girliefriend but then then he is at one with himself for his love for angel. And make cancer eat her. And Scythe and Raythe power together because of it.

Like the power rangers.

Ahah. Do you know who the Power Rangers are? Do you?

I'M IN LOVE.

In love with the light house. In love with the ice cream vendor. You should make Angel encounter his vendor sparodically throughout the story. Like, AH PARIS, and there he is with his vendor or something. They could fall in love if you wanted. As long as he was hawt.

And YOU! You brilliant girl, you. I and in luff with the endings. The Predator oowe he sounds so lovely. Im in love already.

Please say you will update.

:((

you will. You will.

Ugh. I'm dead. And I'll be mad if you dont update. And I shall never bring my hairy ass online again for you. Nevah.

Hihi kitty.

Rambalamabangbang.

hooked.

)

scythe is really annoying...and creepy. i like rayth. he seems nice. so is cancer gonna come up later? angela reminds me of lein. due to the whole religious bit. so yea. update.

hah, i like the ending. and the reffering to angela as an it. although the ending threw me off a bit... the tenses are off. first it's past and then present... i still like. hrm.

aha, i also noticed another thing. angela's (hate her name d:) all light-light. she describes things in that manner... light shimmer on the plate, etc, and then she talks of putting it on in a dark room. butbutbut, next you know, she says the wind is whipping through her hair like fire. like hell. and she sins by swearing. mwhaha. she's manipulative, this one. she'll let others do the sin and yet wants to remain pure. i don't like her much. ee.

by the way, my maami said killing spiders are a sin because they saved the Prophet pbuh. yuhun. bad angel... go pick on something your own size, you paranoid bitch. lol.

heh, she's not a bad character. i like her sometimes. she's concious of what she's doing, but naive.

and i like rayth a lot. he's my favourite for now. he reminds me of a wraith (nyah, rayth)... like the character charon, who'll row the boat over the river styx to hell while transporting bodies to hades. dun dun dun. he wants her to sin too. i would like that... i want her to break, if you know what i mean. i think i'm the only one against her? but i still like rayth. nyah, i formed one of my characters after charon. btw, don't you dare read red sky, the fic-a-thon challenge. it is absolute shit, doo doo, whatever. deserves to be burned. i hate it. garh.

hmm i'm still trying to make out scythe and pimpa pippa. real names would be nice -smirk- but yeah, these add personality. bah, i'm rambling so i'm going to be off. walaikumusalaam... khuda hafiz... shaba khair, larki. lol. i hope you know urdu... or maybe i'm being presumtious. take care little one. byee.

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Ooh. Creepy. Well, I have a number of questions and I'm not too sure you'll answer them all. Or maybe you will. I don't know. But the story is really intriguing. I can't wait for the next chapter.

So...What is Angela's relationship to Scythe and Rayth? Does she live with them or what? Where are her parents and what's up with Scythe's mom? And why is Angela so...I don't know, "heavenly" or "religious" I suppose - you know with the whole "sin" thing? I'm not sure if you know what I mean. haha. but whatever.

There's A LOT of unanswered questions and I'm sure you'll answer them in the next chapter. Hopefully you'll reintroduce "Cancer" too.

Oh, and by the way. I read your biography and read your Muslim. Yay! Me too. Not British but American-Muslim-Pakistani. lol. so yeah, gotta go!

wsalaamgjddsgjdsk. don't call me a loser because. ... because i say so. or else, no more paagal meetings on msn. dsgjkldsg. and yeah i try gettng on but i think you're like, zonked out in europe when i do which is not cool and its not cool for you to blame stuff on school. you should just drop out like me and we can talk 32554543 hours on the computer like the awesome paagal kids we are.

admi means man, you stupid dgfjdgdd.

HAHAHAH. i mean. does it? umm. Yes. it does. Admi means man.

I like Scythe now. A lot more than Rayth becausebecause. Scythe is kinda quirky and his own person, but Rayth sounds like a lot of other guys and i don't like other guys because i like Scythe so. so. so. Scythe rocks. even if he was drunk because he's cute. So I choose TEAM SCYTHE. he should end up with angela.

And yeah Angel is an animal uhhuh. a werewolf? ugh. i have a werewolf story and i dont like it. i lick yours though. -lick-

Pippa sounds like a dog.

And you sound like. Um. Like update. and quit school. it's bad for you.

cyuh later buttameez paagal head.

dont be jealous of my urdu.;)