Reviews for Predator
Creative Destruction chapter 2 . 8/29/2006
O. I'm intrigued. It must be Cancer! he's stalking her! And he's a vampire! or a werewolf! or something strange. lol. but yeah, update soon! i like the way you started this and i want to read more. :)
Bleeding Air chapter 2 . 8/29/2006
aw. spiffy chapter. i kind of had to skim it because i didn't have much time to read, & this review will be short & blah for much the same reason. evil time. :(

uhm. i'm gonna reread it tomorrow, i probably won't be as busy :p

but for now, so this review isn't entirely pointless.. i'll review what i can remember haha.

rayth is cool. i like scythe better, & his girlfriend (pippa?) reminds me of pippi longstockings so.. she can go to hell. haha just kidding. i think she's ohk. well actually i can't remember...

just that scythe shouldn't be with her, & should be off romping with angela. cuz scythe has a cooler name than rayth. though what place does this story take place in? i used "place" twice in that sentence & sounded like a RETARD (who uses that word nowadays, hmm). the names (other than angela) aren't usual names. i do that too.. haha. but there's a reason behind it 50 percent of the time. so i was just wondering if this is slightly futuristic or a/u stuff.

they were eight in the last chapter, right? eight or ten. so they're either sixteen or eighteen. hmm! if i did that math wrong, i'll feel like an idiot.

uh. this review is longer than i thought. i still have homework, gyggle. owell.

hmm! what else can i remember? the end was all mysterious. PRED-A-TAHR. likewhoa. i hope we get to see exactly how that fits in. i think it has something to do with scythe, cuz he was all "predator, roar" in the first chap, foreshadowy like. & i wonder when cancer makes his grand reappearance. at a club, playing ze piano? or maybe he's upped his act & now plays the harmonica. or bagpipes. woo.

hum! oh, yeah. the randomness you put in is funny, but sometimes it gets confusing & kinda draws the reader out of the story. & i'm like. k what? then i realize it was just randomness. it also makes it seem immature. randomness is ohk, just not a whole pile of it. i think there was a lot of it in this chap, so that's only why i'm mentioning it. i stopped a few times & felt kinda.. dispatched from the story haha. k im sounding like a homo.

& im in a weird 'imsobusyimgonnadie' mood. now if you'll excuse me, i have to write out exactly HOW a female becomes aroused. -sex ed!-
trijinkijapan27 chapter 2 . 8/29/2006
Oh GAWD your descriptions are so amazing. xD. As is your writing. Angel is too much. I love the character. And as judgemental as it is- I think she defines a true red head. I just feel so content with the story so far- keep it up!
first of the geeks chapter 2 . 8/29/2006
OK, so I know that this is going to mean NOTHING to you at all, but I write with a main character named Pippa, and she's ditzy and nerdy and ever so much fun, and I was reading her just like that.

But again, this means nothing.

Anywubbly, I find this story to be as amusing as your other ones, what with the whole random "gonna bite your teethies off, biotch!" (...slightly.) So there was the giggle factor- booya.

Then there was the actual coolness of your story/writing style, which was loverly dahling.

I only have one suggestion. After you use the writing technique, "ooga booga, she said blah blah blahing, "ogga booga you smell like politics." (I dunno if you understand this, but it makes sense to me) you shouldn't do it that much. It's just one type of writing style, and after you use it again and again, it just confuses people and makes them overthink. And think the person is saying the same thing twice.

But anyway. This is hilarious and I want to huggle this forever and ever. So... -huggles-
bfoundwanting chapter 2 . 8/29/2006
I like this story better than her ashes and i like her ashes alot... so thats saying something.

Im really excited. i love this type of story... its eerie and thought prevoking and just makes you think and feel.

I cant wait to read more. really. im really excited for it.
Ravene chapter 2 . 8/29/2006
Intriguing, yes :) Werewolfs, huh? Interesting.I love the way that you're able to draw out the suspense in this chapter, how you're telling us things, but not at the same time. It makes me want to know what this is about, what the whole predator significance is. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Scribblesandink chapter 2 . 8/29/2006
ok, i'm slightly confused, is Scythe really 8 years old?
tour d'ivoire chapter 2 . 8/29/2006
This is my favourite one. And I just love the summary. lol

um...look at my story please? :P
you're so postmodern chapter 2 . 8/29/2006
Angela is a little off, lol. She reminds me slightly of Lein, but its cool. Lol, her fear of spiders and the wohle "sin thing". I'm interested in learning about her and Scythe's friendship, too. When I meant Cancer reminded me of Lost, it was semi-part of the way he told her a name and when she asked why his name was that, he related the word to himself. Anyways, nice chap...
Death Princess chapter 2 . 8/29/2006
hi nafeesah. my lil scrubber. im reviewin just so i get a response. im cheap like that. ive gt so much crswrk and scool nearli here. i hvent strted any of it. help me. angst angst.
Em Wolf chapter 2 . 8/29/2006
"I knew I never would."

...Or will she?

Great chapter. I must admit that you've hooked me yet again on another one of your stories, which I absolutely love. Keep up the great work and hopefully I'll be able to piece together everything before the end since i'm taking so many deep, philosophical and english courses this semester. haha
toxic-noodle725 chapter 1 . 8/29/2006
u have a knack for making ur characters really creepy. if they meet, i have a feeling that scythe and "cancer" might not get along well. theres only room for one creepy kid...or maybe they'll get along. only u have the answer to that. so yea im definetly interested. i think im more interested in this one than her ashes. but then again, u only wrote one chappie and her ashes has 5. so update on her ashes and this one especially. i wanna know wuts goin on in this one. (though her ashes is a mystery too.) so post up the next few chapters quickly! toodles!
bulletproof.cupid chapter 1 . 8/27/2006
ee. i like... i like lots. it's brilliant (:

hah, you can tell cancer's not his real name though... cause he hesitated and all. but then again, maybe he's embarassed of it. but i like. hah, diseases spread.

angela. bleh. i never really like that name... until now, i guess. angel suits her, seeing as she might fall. she's such a cute, innocent, naive prey... hah. fitting.

mm-hmm. daddy dear of cancer seemed awkward. who tells a kid that their mom's going to go to hell... inless said mom did something stupid, like cheated on husband or bleh. either way, i like all the dark undertones in your stories. i'm sorryn i haven't read cath yet. i will soon. promise. ee.

maybe you shouldn't believe me. i'm a pathalogical liar you see.

but yes, i wonder what dad's name is now. maybe it's lucifer? haha.

right, i should get going. update this soon. i have to finish reading his ashes too. garh. by the way, seeing as you updated your profile, i'm muslim too. aha. hihi fellow girl. i'm canadian/arab/pakistani muslima. mouthful, ain't it? but yessh, hihi.

take care. and update this soon. your writing is more than words can describe. brilliant.

-min
tearitrightup chapter 1 . 8/26/2006
oh-my-gosh. i LOVE this story. please update soon! and cancer is weird. i like scythe. i feel like as if he and angela are going to date when they grow up. i know, totally random guess, but...ya, UPDATE SOON!
Slideshow chapter 1 . 8/24/2006
UPDATES WILL BE SLOW?

-stabkillstab-

Updates shall not be slow! I demand they be frequent so I can indulge myself in this. Say it with me, updates will not be slow.

Hihi, kitty. -pets-

Do you remember me, paagal.

HAHAH. You have a lot of stories, but I chose this one because you just started and I could keep up! Stories with a lot of chapters are hard to keep up with :(

Lovey, this story is intriguing. I likelike. Cancer skurs me, but I like Rayth.

HOW OLD ARE THEY.

They talk like eeti bitty babies.

Meow, baby.

Update. Or... i'll godfather your ass. On MSN.

Byebye, salaam dollie. I mean paagal. Admi. ADMI! I REMEMBERED ANOTHER WORD! klfjklgfdsgds ADMI! You're my beautiful admi.

meow.
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