|Reviews for More Beautiful Than Me|
| Guest chapter 54 . 9/15/2016
I'm reading this in 2016 and wow what a ride. There was so much angst and drama and i commend Ryan for never giving up. I fell in love with Taylor's character and I somehow feel at the end that he probably wasn't completely honest. I feel like he was in love with Ryan and just said he wasn't in the end to make it easier for Ryan. I would have loved to have read something from Taylor's point of view. I wish you wrote a sequel that revolved around Taylor's point of view. And I know I'm selfish but it would be nice if they were together. But all in all thank you for a wonderful story!
| closetyaoifan chapter 44 . 2/24/2016
OMG if you're actually gonna keep it up for real as Ryan being the "gay best friend" that would be freaking hilarious and I would love it!
At first I thought this story was annoyingly long but it's kind of interesting to go through 7 years of major "coming of age" stuff with a character. ... although sometimes I get really annoyed with his drama and complaining... but I just look to see how many chapters are left and trust that the author is going to make him grow up!
Can't wait to get to the end but I'm really starting to wonder how old they'll be! Lol
Love love love it!
| Bananafishh chapter 54 . 4/17/2015
Bravo Jessie! I just read these in the wrong order but yolo. I commend ur meticulous planning despite how long ago u started (like the laundry detergent bit) and love the idea of just doing basically spin offs using different characters from the same universe. It took me a mo to figure out why Braden sounded so familiar despite it being an unusual name haha. Well done on completing this. It was great xxx
| Feanorian Lamps chapter 54 . 10/18/2014
This story left me in awe. First, the effort and time you must have put into this is phenomenal. I went into this expecting an average story with maybe a bit of romance and slash (I've never really been a romance or slash fan), but this is so much more. There was a lot of power behind the characters, and, while the amount of tragedies in Ryan's life was ridiculous, it seemed like a natural part of the journey. The characters, surprisingly seemed very realistic.
I felt so many different emotions when reading this - I have to say that this is probably one of the all-time best FictionPress works that I have ever read. Your writing definitely improved, but I can't say that it wasn't good even at the very beginning. The anger and love that Ryan felt was very profound, and I'm extremely glad he got a better ending.
Amazing job; I really don't think anything I'm saying quite expresses this enough. This shows a lot of talent.
| Guest chapter 54 . 8/12/2014
I think you should be really proud of this story. Your characters are so real! I was talking to my twin and (she's a writer too) and I asked why is Ryan such an idiot? She said that's what makes characters interesting and relatable. She said that really there are idiotic people all around in the billions of people that live in this world, but they all have great backstorys that should probably be told but probably never would be. I'm glad that you told Ryan's, even though he's fictional, the world is a better place with his story in it.
| Ibbonray chapter 54 . 4/2/2014
Lesson learned: Wait for true love, don't fuck everything up, and definitely don't move to California. (Joking.)
Honestly? I've been reading this on and off for three months straight and there are still no words to describe how much this story impacts me. I think I speak for everyone when I say it teaches a lot of life lessons- but that isn't the gist of it. All the description in the world could be said in this review without fully grasping how meaningful "More Beautiful Than Me" is.
So I'll keep this short. You are a spectacular author and one brilliant brainstormer. Your characters are so stunningly flawed that there's no question as to whether they could be real or not. Your writing is exquisite.
Being quite young myself, this story has opened my mind to events and scenarios that I am not faced with often. Not that I ever considered drug dealing or drinking excessively in the first place- nor did this introduce me to any new topics. The story simply gave me a view into what could be the minds of my peers later in the future, or possibly even at this moment in time. It allows me to understand others. It will allow me to adequately deal with situations in the future.
I'd write so much more here, but I don't know what to say. I suppose it's good to mention I cried consistantly throughout the ending. Any story that can have such an effect on my emotional heartstrings is thereby deemed fantastic.
Looking forward to reading your other stories.
Thank you for writing this. (One day I hope to see this on the shelf of a library.) Best regards, all my love, the likes.
| lhperez311994 chapter 1 . 11/4/2013
First, I wanna give you my congratulations for this story! Are amazing! :)
Second, I want to ask you about chance to translate it to Spanish. I saw is a free story for all people, and I want to give chance people can't read in English could read these books in Spanish.
I don't ask for pay or something like that. I just ask for your authorization for do it.
In this moment, I'm translating K.A. Merikan's free book. "Blood. On the Rocks". They got me their authorization to do it; of course, I let people now is a story that belongs to they. H.B. Pattskyn give me chance to translate her free story "Encantado" too. I did it now. Also I finish to translate "Friends and Lovers?" by Sara York, "To steal the tithe" by Laylah Hunter and "The Maze" by Tia Fielding. She give me the chance to translate "The Maze" and "The great escape". Other authors who give chance to translate their free-stories to Spanish are Celya Kyle (to translate "Joy & Pain"), Kim Fielding (to translate "The gig"), Kay Berrisford (to translate "Prisoner of the mountain watch"), Jeff Erno (to translate "Invisible" and "With this ring"), Luwa Wande (to translate "The cross and the black"), Kyle Adams (to translate "Dirty Zero" and "Dirty Hero") and Z.A. Maxfield (to translate "When Angels Fall").
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| Guest chapter 54 . 9/19/2013
it took me a week to read this, and not because I'm a slow reader, but because i simply HAD to stop reading at some points. I have experienced extreme mood swings and emotional trauma (both in a good and in a bad way) at the hands of 2k pages story. To me, that is just the proof of an extremely talented and good writer. I wanted many times to send a review during the week that I've read this story, ranging from bitter ones (more than once I seriously couldn't not wonder what in the name of anything sweet and pure had the world done to you that you could take such a simple, normal, slice of life kind of story to the darkest possible depths of reality... I told you, I had to stop reading because, just as Ryan learned to notice signs of anger and control it, I was noticing signs of depression... and I had to control it by closing the tab containing your story...) to incredibly impressed ones (i'm writing one now so I ain't giving you any example of that xD)
So yes. Thank you for the... 6 years? you said you spent writing this story? Thank you for those years of your life, and thank you for this week of my life. You are incredible, and I'm sure you know it. This story is an incredibly good one, and I simply cannot fathom how a 16-22 person could have written all that, with all those details (Ryan's feelings as a father for example... that's simply astoundingly well achieved!) and really, I can only blame it on incredible talent.
| Winnie T chapter 14 . 9/15/2013
This is so well written but I can't help but hate Ryan a little bit. He's really selfish. Sorry I don't like him more, seeing as he's the main character. Still, your writing is as awesome as it always is! :D Keep up the great work!
| avidmoonstar chapter 54 . 7/7/2013
To me, the mark of an exceptional story is wanting more after it ends. You blew past that mark. There are so many things I want to know about. Even though it probably took me about 2 weeks to read this story, I still want more.
In the beginning I wasn't sure if I could handle Ryan's bitterness, but eventually it's why I fell in love with his character. It's so real. Little romancy stories that follow the same plot-line are fun to read, but stories with substance are much more enjoyable. I have so much to say but I can't seem to arrange it coherently. I absolutely enjoyed reading it. I laughed, cried (sometimes sobbed), and felt so happy when the characters resolved their issues. I loved it.
As for a sequel, I would suggest Riley or Matty, although Matty might be too far in the future.
| Kaliskia chapter 2 . 6/22/2013
Wow, I'm enjoying it so far
| MyWeirdWorld chapter 54 . 3/15/2013
Honestly, I'm just sort of sitting here in front of my laptop screen trying to come up with the right words. The last few chapters just, emotionally drained me haha
I read this story in a year and a half with a big break inbetween, because somewhere in the middle I think I had to stop reading for a while once or twice. Just moved onto lighter stories and then went back to this again, but the last break was like 6 months long, but then a week and a half ago I went back to this story again, starting where I left off, which was the chapter where Matty was nearly run over.
There is so much drama in this story, but it makes sense. Only somewhere in the middle (the beginning is vague for me, seeing as it's been so long that I read that) it got a bit too much, but it always makes sense. And even though Ryan made so many bad decisions, I never started to hate him. I loved the character more for his bad character traits, because he's a person, and that's what makes this story so very different.
I had a problem with the father though. You let Ryan and Taylor forgive him, but I had some trouble with that. I have a similar background as them, and it just didn't work for me how the father later was forgiven. I understand the regret maybe, and the house full of pictures and everything. I'm only talking about the forgiveness here and maybe getting sober, because he'd been an alcoholic for years. Just, very hard to believe, especially since Ryan is such an angry person.
I had mixed feelings about the ending. Loved Chris and Taylor, but everything ended so happy, and the entire story was so dramatic haha. I wouldn't want a dramatic ending, I prefer this, but it still feels a bit weird after that entire story.
I loved Riley and how he was with Ryan and the way you described everything with Matty was so heartbreaking. I actually teared up when Riley understood that Ryan wasn't planning on coming back and the whole goodbye scene with Matty.
There's so much more, but I'm just rambling on. But I loved this story, it was so emotional and all the characters were so incredibly flawed. And sorry for my English, I'm Dutch haha
| Dark Lynnette chapter 15 . 2/17/2013
I would like to know more about what Taylor's been up to during the past few years other than hanging around the periphery. But I am enjoying the growth we are seeing in Ryan. Still I wonder if Ryan has pretty much been ignoring his brother and just been expecting him to be there all the time? We never see them hang out or how they relate to each other over the years.
| quayjahn chapter 54 . 12/6/2012
I guess 600.000 words seemed to be daunting, but when you read them, worth every single of them.
Sometimes I thought: Hey, what's with that person, wat happened there, but at one point, there was always an answer, the loose ends were tied.
I really enjoyed reading it.
| AmShe256 chapter 40 . 8/12/2012
Did you originally plan for Taylor to die? That would have sucked. I love Taylor. Probably more than Ryan.