I really love this short story- I'm checking back every day for updates!

I'm loving all the character developments, the plotline, wow, it's just amazing!

Well, I can't say this is my favorite chapter for Violet. Sid, on the other hand was all right.

I mean, it wasn't very surprising, but nor was it entirely boring. / Problem is, I don't exactly know what to say about improving or complimenting.

I like Rita's pad though. xD Funny.

Like you said, alot happened in this chapter. The part with Sid was one I had expected to come sooner or later, but it fit.

Interesting chapter, I found myself agreeing with all parties of the story, and at the same time wondering what was going to happen to all parties. It's a shame that Sid got caught, as well as Violet, but of course that all plays a part.

Pretty good from what I read so far.

Well, it appear that everybody's just fucked right now. this was a very entertaining chapter.

All right. It's late; I've got nothing else to do, and heck, this ongoing story actually made me want to review.

First of all the reason I read this story (I confess) is the whole 'male prostitute' in the summary. That mainly, along with the rest of it. I'm a role player (don't know if you know what that is, but whatever) and a lot of times I see those kinds of people portrayed badly. They're weak, they're pathetic, and a lot of the time the person behind it is desperate to get into some lust scene going on.

But Sid has character. He has a job aside from quick desire fixes and a part of him does adjust, Violet aids in regaining some form of backbone and pride. Or something like that. Anyways, I'll say you executed that well.

The relationship between the two is great, the chemistry locks in well. Even though they use each other for consolation and became 'intimate' I like the way you did that. His job is impersonal, and what he does, doesn't seem to make the scene (of which you did not go into gross detail) the kind of special personal feel it should otherwise.

And hey, I didn't actually expect Sid to kill Vince. That was surprising.

There's the good parts and whatnot first. Secondly I'll put in maybe a flaw, or just my straight-out confusion here.

When the newspaper clipping goes out it doesn't mention the customer who was going to meet Sid. Now, I know you said 'I looked up and saw Sid, his eyes both open now and slowly widening as I heard a loud click. A deafening boom.' which I'm thinking means that guy died? So I'm not getting the whole thing there. Uh, yeah. If he didn't die I would understand why he isn't mentioned and probably why he wouldn't ever be mentioned. Don't think standing up for a prostitute he was going to (or about to be pleasured by) seems honorable in his eyes. xD

Hopefully I've not made you keel over or the other people reviewing on this place. Just thought I'd put input, and hopefully you'll never discontinue the story and whatnot because I'd be sad.

-Dolly a.k.a Undead Serenade

yes. wonderful. loving the intrigue.

Well, I must say that this Joel character was a bit of a surprise, but it fits. I personally think they should've left town, or admitted to the police that the death occured by self defense. But other than that, I like it.

Another good chapter, I find myself wondering if Vincent is really dead, or not. Of course, us readers will most likely find out.

damn, this is one strangely seductive story. i didn't think i'd have to read it as badly as i did, and i never would have guessed that i'd like it as much as i did. nor did i predict that i would be hovering around fictionpress, waiting for your next installment. bravo,

honorata

my god, that was beautiful!

This has to be one of the best things i have ever read!

Amazing chapters, I simply love them! Update soon!

This was an interesting chapter, though it was short, as you stated. I guess it was showing the bond between the two of them, and the growth that they'll go through.

This is oddly beautiful. A strange romance indeed, but I must say I love it. Great detail. Oh and, by the way, Sid is really rediculously sexy. Good job! _~