I think it would've been better if Duraz died. To be realistic, there is no perfect ending. So maybe you could've added some kind of twist wherein the main character was at a huge disadvantage and no one was there to protect her. In most of the chapters, Celia was always surrounded with protection. She had a dragon, a mate, lots of friends who'd sacrifice their lives for her. The story would've captured me more if their was a scene where she was alone and unprotected. Its just a suggestion and a somewhat like constructive criticism. Though i could clearly see what your plot is all about. And it is good that your ideas shine through this story. Quite unique...

The ending made me burst out in laughter XD well done, I loved this story! This story actually swept me up in it's emotions, making me laugh out loud, cry, snicker and even made me (I'm ashamed and a little impressed to admit this) aroused back in chapter 7 XD Damn, you're awesome XD You've brilliantly turned a classic into something that can be enjoyed immensely! I'm looking forward to reading the sequal XD

Grtz Silencia

Ok, I won't say you don't have talent... because you do. But as for this story, you have absolutely no originality. It just screams Twilight the entire time. Sorry hun, but it really does. And everything moves along to fast... but you're finished so it's kinda too late for that.

Very interesting so far but I've noticed that your punctuation when you use dialogue is a bit off.

If you ever come to re edit this again here's a site with some great tips about this problem

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I notice this far more than other times because I had this problem myself haha.

Happy writing,

Amy.

Great story ]

OOOHHH! How will she take it?

You mentioned that Celia made a mistake of not finding proof on vampires not being real but the question was on existence of vampire. I am confused at that. Its just a minor thing but just pointing out.:D

By revamp, do you mean there could be certain plot changes too?

Interesting

AWESOME! I CANNOT WAIT TO READ THE SEQUEL!

THIS WAS COMPLETELY AWESOME! I HAVE TO SAY THAT I LOVE VOLANTE! I JUST LOVE THE WAY HE CARES FOR CELIA! UH-MAY-ZING AND AW-SUHM!

that was...AW-SUHM!

AWESOME!

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! THAT'S HILARIOUS! I LOVED THE DRAGON IN THE BOX THING! AND THIS WAS A VERY LONG CHAPTER! YAY!

I loved the dragon part. Dragons are AWESOME! YAY DRAGONS!