|Reviews for water baby|
| Ashlee Pond chapter 1 . 4/11/2011
I like the feelings of longing and of freedom that you've portrayed here.
It flows nicely and you've used the parentheses appropriately.
| Silver Duchess chapter 1 . 6/9/2010
Oh, I like this. The way you describe everything.
| Violet Marx chapter 1 . 11/25/2006
I love this one! My favorite part is definitely '(starfish) soul'.
| laughter at the funeral chapter 1 . 10/19/2006
wow...there is such a great imagery in here...especially the "water baby" and the "mermaid scales"...they sound really catchy and hyphaluting(?)...
| fairytale failure chapter 1 . 9/27/2006
Ooh, I especially like where you turn waves of hair into water your review...it was a figurative death. :P
| Aetha Daemon chapter 1 . 9/6/2006
I won't be like those people who give short reviews. I won't! Here is something with some meat to it:
I like the presentation of the poem, overall, because the visual aesthetics blend so well with the subject of the poem.. Bright, sunny... because of the uneven spacing, the random, yet not random, parentheses and line skips. The italics and font-funnies also help!
I also liked how you only capitalized one word-God- showing that this was an important subject. It stood out, which drew the eye towards the end of the poem.
It felt very medeterranian...
The words that you chose completed the aesthicity of it, because they all jumped out. They all held meaning, and provided a visual. I especially like "cerulean", "water baby", and "scales" because they just give me a little shiver. I'm weird like that. But the fact that you wrote this with such a fun tone, and managed to add depth to it, is pretty cool.
And the way that you add depth-you add a stanza about the somewhat mystical qualities of the tides, in parentheses as if you were whispering a secret to the wind...
I loved this. If you want plain and simple. It was really very good.
| theory of black chapter 1 . 8/28/2006
Yay for water babies! I love this one, I'm going to add it to my favorites if I have room. Seriously, I think it's the best one you've written in an extremely long time. )
| classic violet chapter 1 . 8/27/2006
Just absolutely gorgeous! I LOVE that first stanza to no end. Lovely poem. It sparkled, love it.
| ode to a firefly chapter 1 . 8/27/2006
Do starfish have souls? P
| Aquafied chapter 1 . 8/26/2006
(sometimes blue as cerulean)
-hm, that reminds me of something long ago
| dress her up in fairytales chapter 1 . 8/26/2006
"and what a God he was/to decorate the sea/and sky wit s"
| Elliptical Shapes chapter 1 . 8/26/2006
Very interesting, you have an aqueous soul, you do.
Pulse like the waves, my friend.