Reviews for For You
KML92 chapter 1 . 4/4/2012
good job with this poem. I liked it.

KML92
Twilight Starr chapter 1 . 9/28/2007
Great song.

Good luck with writing and this song.

Have a wonderful day. :)

Twilight Starr
nobodyfromnowhere chapter 1 . 1/12/2007
Hello. I found your song by random surfing and I really liked it. It reminded me of another song I've heard before that really clicked with me. I'm including it so you can see it and maybe "hear" the similarities.

time

only time

could never take me away from you

and why

should it try

time never cares just what we do

it just sits on a star

and gazes down

dropping its moments all around

and if i could wish upon that star

i would find what you dream

and then ask god to grant it

i wanted

to say this

long before this dark would fall

at night i

would pray this

then wonder if god heard at all

for the chances i've had are now long gone

and that star is no longer wished upon

for on this night it seems too far away

try

i have tried

to pretend that i don't care

but then

sleep arrives

and in every dream i find you there

but i don't want the past to be my life

and i don't want to live inside the night

but i don't want to see your shadow fade

so i sleep and i dream

though i don't understand it

i wanted

to say this

long before this dark would fall

at night i

would pray this

then wonder if god heard at all

for the chances i've had are now long gone

and that star is no longer wished upon

for on this night it seems too far away

you can live your life in a thousand ways

but it all comes down to that single day

when you realize what you regret

what you can't reclaim but you can't forget

if i could just fall back into my life

and find you there inside this night

and let eternity just drift away
000000000 chapter 1 . 10/26/2006
That's awesome! It has a simpleness, but there's a deepness behind the words that I can't describe... anyways, it's awesome! Keep writing! Vanessa
Love Lulu chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
Remember: Don't let life beat you. Just get back up and show your strength.
AK the Twilight chapter 1 . 8/29/2006
This song's really well written; the lyrics are deep and simplistic and there's a solid rhythm. Overall, really great job.
Patito-Feo chapter 1 . 8/29/2006
i like that. kinda sad but i think its the emotion you display that makes the poem what it is. your right... its hard to feel some emotions towards others when they are obviously blind to you.
ohmiaohmy chapter 1 . 8/28/2006
"Lock the door,And close the blinds.

But don’t ignore this life,Don’t ignore the signs."

was my favorite part. I loved it! I only wish I knew how it sounded.

one question though."‘Cause I’m right here,Standing beside you.

Even if you can’t see me,Just look behind you"

is it behind or beside? I understand that they keep the "d" sound rhyme, but you could do "close by". though, it's only a minor detail. if you do change it, keep the "behind" (I thought that was very fitting). Anyway. great work!
ClassicTrick chapter 1 . 8/28/2006
hmm this reminds me of the band Paramore for some reasongood job, I could imagine it being a songClassic Trick