What! No! That was brilliant you have to continue soon, I want to know who the stranger was! This story has been really enjoyable though a tad upsetting. When she told him that her sister had been pregnant I could be found with "No you fool! Why did you tell him!" escaping my lips. I would have liked to see a bit more of Carrie and John's relationship as it felt a bit quick, but then again there is not really that much more you could right ad if you did it might and up too long. Anyway I am now taking too long in writing this and my dog is pleading to go for a walk. So continue soon.

Hey! We seem to have lost touch lately... It's probably my fault. This chapter is really great though. I love the ending *grins* sarcasm and irony are so awesome! You also have some really great description. like right here:

"The first raindrop slid past her window, straight and true as a knife slash; and for a split second it looked like the glass had been cut in two. Moments later, it started to rain heavily, and the window quickly became streaked with raindrops, turning into a silver cobweb of shining tears."

That's really an amazing paragraph. I really like it!

I hope you're going to update soon because I really want to know what happens next!

Oh my gosh...this story is intense...wow...it is so sad and heartwrenching...i really hope you update soon because i really can't wait to read more!

wow. that's heavy. what a way to end the chapter. not that it's bad. It's good. I just have one comment. this phrase: "And to her, it explained Carrie's silences and mysteriousness," i'm pretty sure it's Kaye, not Carrie. But anyways. I love this story! i really hope you keep it going!

evil cliffie... wow, this is a great chapter, it provides some information that i had been wondering about. So, at least Kay wasn't suicidal, that's a relief. I also understand how Carrie feels about her grief. about not crying, about not dying. (that sounds like a poem, heehee) i also think it's interesting the Carrie thinks Kay was a better person. That makes the story much more interesting. Great Work!

ok, who is Jake, and how exactly did Kaye die? i thought she jumped through the window, but i feel like something else happened. I really hope you continue this story, i want to know what happens.

oh my god, wow. that is a really great, really intense beginning. I like the way it starts right in the action. What's that called, in media res? or something. anyways, this looks great so far!