Reviews for One Shot No 5: Tough Luck
blurrylights chapter 1 . 1/25/2009
Oh my goodness...that was so terrible! I really enjoyed it because it was awesome, but that was...such a bad thing for Peter to think right after she died. Oh my goodness. Terrible referring to Peter's thought, fyi. I was so NOT dissing your work, because this was awesome.

Great job!
Chryssa'2305 chapter 1 . 11/8/2008
LOL, haha, that's funny. I feel bad for Pete, though, is he ever gonna get a girl? Atleast he's cute.

Great story-I mean, one-shot, hehe.
N. White chapter 1 . 8/23/2007
Too bad for Pete..I like the way you mix his thoughts in with the dialogue, it's way a way more interesting way to show he's nervous than just saying "Pete was nervous".
Kelina and Liliana chapter 1 . 3/21/2007
Now that luck is total crap. poor mime
grafiti rtk chapter 1 . 12/29/2006
That was weird, to say the least. Lol. Loved it! So random...
RedHairedWriter chapter 1 . 12/15/2006
Some of the dialog was confusing, but not major. It’s ironic, and dark, I wouldn't go so far as saying its dark humor. It isn't bad. I think it's just wrongly categorized.
Storysmith chapter 1 . 12/3/2006
This is silly. But the cynical side of me loves it. Awesome. I love the deviation from the expected to the completely random. ery awesome. And guys are silly...
criti-sized chapter 1 . 9/17/2006
Wow, that was a bit of a surprise. For her to say yes, then get killed by a stone. This one had me laughing alot at the irony of it.
Crazy Talk chapter 1 . 8/31/2006
Guys don't REALLY stress that hard, do they? Nah. They couldn't possibly. If they did, I might have to take pity on Will. But everybody knows that confidence grows on trees. you just have to smart enough to climb the right one...
inktube chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
lol...this is the best one...
Elliptical Shapes chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
That was a bit fucked up.

Keep writing,

Alan.