|Reviews for Emerald Eyes|
| One-Hand Clap chapter 1 . 4/19/2008
Although I loved the general theme of this poem because it was so origonal, I have to admit I had a problem with your formatting. Okay, so I think you shouldn't break up each line like that - so it looks like this:
Emerald Eyes, give me a sign
tell me how to stop it
Emerald Eyes give me a sign
Tell me how to stop it
I also think you shouldn't seperate the stanzas with those '-'s! It disrupts my train of thought whilst reading. Sorry!
- Clap Trap, from Review Marathon [link in profile]
| felicia13 chapter 1 . 10/1/2006
Fun. An art, really. Isn't that all that poetry is? And art is the lifeblood of us ...
The whole thing had a certain flow to it. Which is a feat, really, because lots of times it all comes out looking weird and a bit gross. But this worked and flowed and was river-y.
The last stanza was quite the ending. "Don't leave me now/Emerald Eyes"
| Blessed Oblivion chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
question whois this dedicated to? anyone in particular?
| Sir Scott chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
Kill me in your bed. I loved that line. Great poem.
Wishing You Good Health And Plenty Of Wealth, ~SirScott~
| The Forgotten Maiden chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
| bipedalcooney chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
Very nicely written. I like the repetitions. Great work and keep writing.
| from beneath the bell jar chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
Definitely a good title phrase. Cool piece. I like the "kill me in your bed" line - very provocative.
| Random-Idiocity chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
''Emerald Eyes bring me closerInto your spider’s web'' I thought that line was excellent.. Keep it Up!