Reviews for Emerald Eyes
One-Hand Clap chapter 1 . 4/19/2008
Although I loved the general theme of this poem because it was so origonal, I have to admit I had a problem with your formatting. Okay, so I think you shouldn't break up each line like that - so it looks like this:

Emerald Eyes, give me a sign

tell me how to stop it

Instead of:

Emerald Eyes give me a sign

Tell me how to stop it

I also think you shouldn't seperate the stanzas with those '-'s! It disrupts my train of thought whilst reading. Sorry!

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felicia13 chapter 1 . 10/1/2006
Fun. An art, really. Isn't that all that poetry is? And art is the lifeblood of us ...

The whole thing had a certain flow to it. Which is a feat, really, because lots of times it all comes out looking weird and a bit gross. But this worked and flowed and was river-y.

The last stanza was quite the ending. "Don't leave me now/Emerald Eyes"

Felicia.
Blessed Oblivion chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
question whois this dedicated to? anyone in particular?
Sir Scott chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
Kill me in your bed. I loved that line. Great poem.

Wishing You Good Health And Plenty Of Wealth, ~SirScott~
The Forgotten Maiden chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
Ah, beautiful.
bipedalcooney chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
Very nicely written. I like the repetitions. Great work and keep writing.
from beneath the bell jar chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
Definitely a good title phrase. Cool piece. I like the "kill me in your bed" line - very provocative.
Random-Idiocity chapter 1 . 8/30/2006
''Emerald Eyes bring me closerInto your spider’s web'' I thought that line was excellent.. Keep it Up!