|Reviews for Oblivion|
| the duck in the rain chapter 1 . 8/31/2006
one spelling problem that just got over looked, Line 16 you accidentally left the 'e' out of 'sense'. i hate it when that stuff happens.
this is a pretty little poem. i loved LOVED the reference to the trees giggling. there are such wonderful juxtapositions in this poem. the city of trees being a nice one. it doesn't seem to fit but as you go on with the poem it does. there was a little bit of a problem with flow in Line 8 i thought, but it was probably just me.
it's sad, elegant. it's very pretty.
| the-foresight chapter 1 . 8/31/2006
That was really beautiful, you brought the loneliness and emptiness across really well. And it conjured up loads of images, which is good.