Reviews for Wrap In
All Alone With Her Thoughts chapter 1 . 12/28/2006
Again, you really need puncuation! It's hard to follow the poem with out it. Nice poem overall.

Rowan.
Violet Marx chapter 1 . 12/13/2006
I like it. :] It's very truthful.
Psychedelia chapter 1 . 9/27/2006
Pretty nice. Not sure what you mean by the lack of punctuation though.
S. R. Devaste chapter 1 . 9/4/2006
The poem itself has a nice flow and I like the first line, and dreams wrapped up in someone else, but after that it just kind of disinagrates into a bunch of pretty words slowly loosing their meaning.
believe-in-futures chapter 1 . 9/1/2006
Should it be esophagus or sarcophogus at the end of the second stanza?

I really like the first stanza. I also like the second but the third doesn't work for me. The end ties it all together and It isn't fatal to the poem, I just don't like it. I think it's a cop out compared to your first two stanzas. The only bit I like is the line, "feeling young with old ideas".

Not a bad poem.
Stale.Cracker chapter 1 . 8/31/2006
OMG SINEWSICLE IL THISbut espohagus sorta kills the rhythm...other than that, it was GREAT!~FrodoPLEASE REVIEW BACK 8D