Kyle came across as a guy who took advantage of an innocent kid. And i'm pretty sure that there aren't any 15 year olds who are that naive about sex. Hell, I bet 11 year olds are more aware about it that Ethan was. It just came across as Ethan having the naivety of an 8 year old child and Kyle seemed like a somewhat creepy pedo because of Ethan's naivety. Basically, it was unbelievable and unrealistic (if that's possible?). Anyway, just trying to help you with some constructive criticism.
-HR

okay. this is...okay, I guess, but one thing pissed me off:

No one stutters on IMs.

seriously. if you're on the computer, you can't write a stutter - only when you're in a conversation. just sayin'.

hot! sexy! cute! just down right amazing... i think u should continue!

damn, what a pedophile. i mean, the poor kid's just a freshman, what's this dude playing at? naw, i'm so horny from that, though... but i don't get why he's stuttering when he's typing. i mean, i guess you're trying to convey his nervousness or something, but if i was this kid in a chatroom, i'd be acting the ice, you know what i mean? i'd be total chill. i-i w-wouldn't st-st-st-stutter when i typed, babe. i'd play cool, yeah? well, anyway. whatever. good, i guess.

Thought I'd let you know, I just got out of the hospital. I was taken there because I fainted due to blood loss from the major nose bleed I had after reading this story. No but seriously I LOVED IT! You're an awesome writer! Keep up the good work! -

awesome i love reading the innocent being unknowingly corrupted, but cant wait to see what happens with the bullies...more please

Damn, this was really really good. Ethan's innocence is so cute. You trully are a genious. I thought that there would be some angst in it and throughly surprised and glad there isn't. Good job

OMG! I have found my new best friend! *kicks current best friend off best friend pedistal* i love your story, and you're an amazing writer! honestly, i've never met a 15 year old that inocent, but it works in this story! I can't wait for you to make another story! Please make it soon!

-Miura

(& sorry for the mispellings, i'm not completely awake right now...)

I have to laugh at how innocent the kid is. I wasn't this ... er... ignorant about the subject at 15. I promise you I wasn't. lol. (I was just turned 16 about 4 months ago.? haha. Anyways, I love his submissive personality. He seems so nonchalant.

That was a really hot and wild story! Great job!

Nice. expertly written, Foxgod,my friend, is desterbed. But i relly thought it was cool.

you are one sick mother fucker how can you write such a thing you twisted sick son of a bitch!

wow. that was interesting.