Oh, I loved this chapter! Mark is so sweet! The white room...its a little creepy though, *shudder* Reminds me of those rooms for crazy people with the padded floors and padded walls where everything is always white... *double shudder *

Haha! And the line that says something about Mark having a closet, I swear to God I had to re-read that sentence like four times because for some reason I kept seeing it as 'He had a corset,' ...which would really change the story significantly...after I realized it was closet and laughed forever, but I have a warped sense of humor.

Anyway this was an awesome chapter - one of my favorites, and the weekend is going to go so slow, because you won't be updating! :O Oh well. I live. I guess.

Keep up the awesome work!

Thanks for getting another chapter out so quickly. I enjoyed it. :)

Omg wow. This chapter was beautifully written! Good job! I love it and I can not wait for you to update!

This is for chapter 5, oh my god, I loved the last line. "my santuary" , dialouge needs some work, bit quick just as I said, but Daniels! Ah! I'm very angry with Nick and I can understand Daniels, but still, he was just all, "you can trust me" "tell me", but he doesn't want to hear it. I wanted him to chase after her so bad. Be Mr. Charming and save the day. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Ok, this is for chapter four, aw Daniels is so cute and sweet, and I love him. Nick is a bastard to say the least! Some of the things Nancy said seemed random though, random cursing, but still, she seems like a snot none the less. I shall read on now!

Oh, I forgot to tell you, I loved that passion for the pain at the beginning of Chappie 1 or 2 or whatever it's called. Brillant word choice. Kind of irked at the Daniels kid automatically being so touchy feely right after she tried to kill herself, but still it's a story and that's how it goes. I'm just trying to picture it, and it would be slower, but then again I don't think this site has room for a whole lifetime. Good angsty-ness. I'm only saying this because of your potentional, it's ginormous! ... if that's how you spell it.

Oh my, I love this story. You really should have more reviews than this.

Keep writing!

Ok, alot different then the prolouge, not bad, just fast, lacking a bit of the detail you had before, you could have done alot more with this, but it's capturing enough. I just don't believe you polished it like you did the other one, if you just went over a bit, it would be amazing, right now it's just good. Which is not a bad thing at all.

Wow, you are a great author. This is too good for this website, there are so many shotty stories, which you can't help but read out of boredom, but when you find the reall talented authors who you can tell work through their pieces, editting, and actually thinking about it, that's when I have to stop and pray they know they are just too good for this place. Not that I want you to stop writing, oh my god no!, but still you are awesome! Off to next chapter.

I LOVE THIS STORY! You're such a wonderful author...wow...I can not wait for you to post more! Would it still count it I just reviewed three times?

Here's your second review.

That would be very awkward if Nick showed up visiting his cousin. Why does Evey call Mark by his last name? I'm interested in learning more about why Mark is doing all this.

You have such a beautiful writing style - a brilliant word choice, wondeful spacing, and you know how to grab the reader's attention and not let go. Awesome job. Update soon!