Reviews for What I deserve
Alena D'Etoiles chapter 1 . 11/28/2006
That last line should be "Are what I deserve." Other than that, I liked it. The words were a little bland, but the message is clear. Good work.
VestriDementisFemina chapter 1 . 10/18/2006
I like this one. I'd change the line 'I've hurt people mentally', though. This is a very abstract, emotional poem, and 'mentally' is sort of clunky and technical. It draws away from the rest of the poem. Good work!
moonsliver86 chapter 1 . 9/6/2006
not bad but i feel that the poem only manages to lightly graze my emotions; it could still be improved; but overall, good job