Reviews for Treading Dust Like Water
R. Louise chapter 1 . 2/1/2007
Completely amazing... and much more.
none of burt's beeswax chapter 1 . 12/5/2006
god, your imagery is amazing. the first stanza just draws the reader in. pure beauty.
D. Rochelle chapter 1 . 10/26/2006
Living origami. I hope not - I have a hard time with the inanimate kind. :)

I like this poem a lot. It seems sort of blurry and hazy, kind of with a sparkly overcoating. The only thing I can constructively crit is the second stanza. The "her fall" is a nice touch at the end, but it drives me crazy to have the fifth line for those two words. It would be 4/4/3/3/1 without it. I dunno, don't listen to me too much, I'm just a structure junkie.

Good poem, please keep writing. :)
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 10/17/2006
I really love that last line... beautifully done
fairytale failure chapter 1 . 9/18/2006
One of your sharpest images. And isn't there something about her that is still beautiful? anyway, the last group of three lines had the most impact, or so I thought. I also liked Behind kohl dirtied eyes she merges into mundane. because makeup is supposed to make you pretty...so its powerful.
You Make Me Smile A Lot chapter 1 . 9/11/2006
that was great (better than mine) thanx for reviewing my peom_
AchtungBabyAchtung chapter 1 . 9/9/2006
i love the shorter lines, and the broken bits. plus i like the way it feels quiet and understated, despite the beautiful desprip. iz x
Aslan Israel chapter 1 . 9/8/2006
Brilliance trapped. Bittersweet, in the end. but oh so beautiful.
White is a Sin chapter 1 . 9/8/2006
*stares blankly* a little confusing. Though a lot of my poems end up like "what the..."

I like it. Great description. I guess i could picture most of it..._

Thanks for the review. I was pretty unsure of that poem _

I like your user name _
n-Iceness chapter 1 . 9/7/2006
great poem..