|Reviews for This is Your Story, This is Your Ending|
| Every Thought chapter 2 . 10/8/2006
You beat me to it. My older brothers had the "Choose Your Own Adventure" books in the 80's, so when I was reading through one a few months ago, I thought I'd run with the idea myself. I guess I'll just read yours instead. Anyway, I'm in high spirits because I didn't get killed off yet. Looking forward to how long I last.
Update soon,Every Thought
| Lemon Glass chapter 3 . 9/8/2006
I AM TOTALLY GOING TO SECTION 4! Any ways, great job. Weird though, you didn't mention before that he was a hunchback so that was just weird.
UPDATE NOW!-Lemon Glass
| Syd Diamond chapter 3 . 9/7/2006
Not bad. I think that the plot in and of itself is very interesting but the execution, not so much. See, there is not a lot of detail. It seems as if things, sequences, are just jumping around. My suggestion is that you slow it down a bit, add a little more detail. Also, reread the story, there are a few spelling errors here and there, nothing major. I think that with a little tweaking the story will get better. Just keep at it until it sounds right, you'll get it. ~La Primavera