|Reviews for Jacked|
| dartbreezy chapter 1 . 7/1/2012
Jay sounds like a psychopath . Just a little bit though . I was secretly hoping that she was a professional pickpocket and took his keys during the hug .
I hope you'd be able to write more on this !
| Imperfect-Princess chapter 1 . 9/16/2011
You know, it has been a very, very, very long time since a story interested me so much. Although it's on hold, I'm looking forward to when you pick it back up again and add a new chapter.
Happy ready, -IP
| DorkExpress chapter 1 . 9/2/2011
Hahaha... this JJ dude is funny! So sarcastic and remarkful! I just love it!
| MsIloveVampires chapter 1 . 4/22/2011
ah this is so good!
please continue soon :D
| angel-Janna chapter 1 . 8/30/2010
Good setting, believable characters, and I kind of like Jay... He's the real Hustle!
Keep it up!
| Alanisaur chapter 1 . 5/22/2010
This is really good. You have to update! Even if it is on hold! I love this story! I cant wait to see where it goes!
| ryse chapter 1 . 4/6/2010
| je-kay24 chapter 1 . 12/10/2009
muse muse you must return :)
this beginning is a great start. we got a good look and understanding of Jay's personality and character
cant wait to get into marissa's character
i hope your inspiration returns soon so you can begin to update this story... from just this chapter you can tell it will be a great story and we can see just how talented you are as a writer :)
| lexis chapter 1 . 12/2/2009
This was a great start, I really liked it, and if you play your cards right, it could turn out to be an even greater story! I would like to make some suggestions, but dont take offence though because they are merely suggestion and u can choose to ignore them;first, When they meet again Marissa shouldn't remember him at first(it always makes the story more "blah" if the girl chases the guy and it would make him more intruged by her because her not remembering makes her look like she's been to bussy, with more important things, to dwell on a random person, hi. So in turn that makes him curious witch makes him chase her not the other way around.) Second, the girl, Marissa, shouldn't be like what he first thought her to be like, spoiled, she should've had to work for her money. Third, her and her brother should've gone through a hart ache, that makes it so her brother is all she has. My last suggestion is... jelousy! have jay at some point be very jelousy of another man over Marissa! Jelousy always, in my oppinoin makes a story better!
Can't wait for this story to be up dated! You dont have to listen to word i said so please dont take any offence!
| cheri du mien chapter 1 . 8/5/2009
Just out of curiosity, do you plan on continuing this story? Cause there are reviews for chapter 3, but I only see one...please continue. This is so awesome.
| mythee chapter 1 . 5/21/2009
It's me again.
Weren't there more chapters before? Something about his friends and his sister and he sold some crappy gaget to this guy and he demanded a refund, a laptop or something? Maybe I'm wrong...wrong story? well, if I'm right, it means I have a kick-ass memory.
| Bellusss chapter 1 . 4/10/2009
Reasons Why You Should Continue This Story:
1. This story kicks ass
2. There's no other story on fictionPress that is like yours
3. You haven't updated in a little over two years...
4. You already have over a hundred reviews from people begging you to update
5. Just think of all the girls in the world reading your story and not crying on strangers' shoulders
6. No body likes it when a story captures their attention but the author is flighty
7. I really, really like your story :D
so... kudos for the good start :) update?
| silver shaft chapter 1 . 3/11/2009
haha so i read this anyway even though it said on hold...i really liked it though.
wow what an asshole this fellow is. lol.
| poppiesinoctober chapter 1 . 1/28/2009
Wow. I really like this.
I really would love to see more of this.
But, um, seeing how it's been a while since you updated, I don't know.
But, if you every do, I will definitely read this!
It's really interesting.
| Camelia Sinensis chapter 1 . 12/21/2008
This was funny and sexy (dunno how you did that, though) and really smooth.
It was like a James Bond novel, except he ain't an agent. ;) I just loved it to bits!
"It was just business." Brilliant.
I really hope there's more, it'd be a shame if we didn't get to see more of Jay.