Reviews for Smooth
nighthuntress05 chapter 1 . 2/27/2007
Beautiful. I especially love the line "shave

you till you’re pure and fit my

idolatry."
frailty chapter 1 . 12/2/2006
"i bloom like rancid roses

all across your back" I love love love this line... beautiful...
die kleine maus chapter 1 . 9/29/2006
"in the shower i dominate", i like that. Have you ever read "The PowerBook" by Jeannette Winterson? I think you'd love it.
Emiley chapter 1 . 9/29/2006
I like the way you write, I love you use of words :) a little rude for me maybe, but I still like it
elegiac lies chapter 1 . 9/16/2006
just, wow.i like it alot.
realityescapesher chapter 1 . 9/13/2006
i LOVE "i bloom like rancid roses/all across your back" and "the vodka fucks my throat hard." because that's such a perfect image for vodka. and i also love the child safety scissors reference. very cool.

-alyps thanks for the review. you pretty much made my world.
Theory Of The 4th Dimension chapter 1 . 9/13/2006
Damn...very high-strong poem you've got here. Love your metaphors and wordings. The momentum of this is like a fully-loaded machine gun on a steam roller, it just keeps on coming and it hits you hard.
This Modern Love chapter 1 . 9/7/2006
sensual, metaphorical. wow. amazingly lustful.
Countess Chocula chapter 1 . 9/7/2006
Wow. I don't really know what to say but...wow...