|Reviews for Whirlwind|
| French The Llama chapter 1 . 3/14
So beautiful. I love the end particularly, with the tone switch. The brackets work well too. Maybe add some stanza breaks for each new idea.
| lookingwest chapter 1 . 3/14/2010
I love the way that you use parentheses to sort of convey really short terse images that work wonderfully in this poem. I like the little bits of desperation that sort of come out and the emotion behind it too. There were some powerful lines for a free verse poem, such as "give in/go under." I really like how you ended the latter line with a period, the way you formatted it as a free verse was a relief because so many people don't bother to format. I also like how you sort of have an end that's a little hopeful, it's nice, it adds to the piece and doesn't leave the reader completely in anguish, but instead leaves on a little moment of perhaps hope with the image of the calm outside.
| Isca chapter 1 . 7/5/2008
I liked the structure of the lines (i.e. places, spaces, faces).
"Give in." A simple line; full of pain. :)
| nimue webweaver chapter 1 . 12/17/2006
| tuieri chapter 1 . 12/1/2006
are you sure 'tisn't a song?
i like "The deep has no memory/The dark knows no sin"
| Stary Dynamo chapter 1 . 9/10/2006
wow, very powerful. i can deffinately relate to what this is saying, the feeling that you have to hide some things so no one else can see what's really going on. awesome job, man, welcome back :)