|Reviews for Forget Me Not|
| le roi des pirates chapter 1 . 1/26/2009
This was awesome! I loved the repitition. It was so dark. It also made me laugh. Please keep it up :)
| AbderianViolet chapter 1 . 2/10/2008
yes, so I know this is an old one AND that I already 'reviewed' it...if you can call that little thing a review.
friend or not, I'm a literature snob and so that's why I usually don't review; after reading emerson and poe and hawethorne, it gets harder and harder to appreciate fantasy etc.
I have always liked this little story. I like the way it's told, I like the parallel of dodging bullets pulled in at the end, I like the idea, probably for the same odd little twisted bit that made you want to write it :D.
It could use a little polishing, like most things. Just a couple little titchy things that would probably only get you annoyed at me if I pointed them out, so you probably shouldn't even bother.
I just wanted to give you a review and, like I said, this is a story I've always liked.
You've worked in the repetetive here, and what might help to make it more effective is even shorter, choppier sentences, like a director would use staggered, choppy shots to show that the subject isn't all there. You've got it a little bit, with the single lines - it breaks it up.
anyway, yeah. again, I just wanted to give you a review from my more literature-snob side.
| violet chapter 1 . 9/23/2006
O.O I liken ze format, I liken ze twist.
| dreamshell chapter 1 . 9/12/2006
This was enjoyable. Wonderfully dark and darkly humorous. It's really hard to pick one particular line that I like because they're all great, but if I had to, it'd be this;
"Me, with a gun I don’t even know the name of."
I just love that for some reason. Maybe because of the idea of being able to be so ignorant of something that can do so much damage.
| Archive of the Insane chapter 1 . 9/9/2006
Dude...very good.i'm awestruck.i cant find a thing to criticize. it's extremely good keep writing like this.
| shiloh fire chapter 1 . 9/9/2006
you spelled hole wrong...wholelike that really matters thoughbut i liked itwhich is kind of the only part of this review that mattersi like how twisted it was...and you write very well, you person of many names