|Reviews for This Was My Life|
| CL Gingerich chapter 3 . 6/12/2007
Ophelia Dubois Alberink. That is quite a mouthful. You may need to keep an eye on this new character. Things could become very peculiar. Lovely chapter.
| CantThinkOfGoodName chapter 1 . 9/13/2006
I like how you use repetition to make the reader feel the same pain the protagonist has -the excruciatingly deep detail into the smallest things. Although this is a 3rd person perspective, it serves to make the protagonist more on the edge and his stability questionable.
I also like your use of emphasis -one of my personal favorites in writing. "Let me start again" is what I mean. You have that phrase as a line of its own. -Little tricks like this will show off your skill and will look much better in comparison to the writer that never thought of doing this. In terms of business, that’s how you compete in any form of art.
| Terror-and-Love chapter 2 . 9/13/2006
And I can feel the monotony and soul draining existance that is life a Suburb.
Those things are evil.
| CL Gingerich chapter 1 . 9/12/2006
Hmm... a very interesting and intriguing plot. Please feel free to continue because you have a captive audience. :-) Keep up the work!