Reviews for All She Had To Do Was Smile |
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![]() ![]() ![]() is this story over? i hope not cause i really like it. (even though this is the frist time a review it, and i'm terribly sorry about it. ) but i sure hope that youcomtinue this story. kepp up the grat writting skills. xo's Minxie |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey :) I'm halfway through reading (approx) your novel. I really like it! The emotion I'm feeling right now is really overwhelming and I'd like to compliment your amazing storyline, characters and expression. One thing that's been annoying me though - slightly (i tend to notice the little things) is you like to use 'to' instead of 'too' and 'two' alot. 'to' i.e. i go to 'too' as in too much, too bad and 'two' as in the quanitity or number. I'm sure you didn't realise you were doing this but just keep an eye out. This really is an amazing story :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh I hate Adams! please update! i love your story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() mkay, so, several things to say about this story. ~ It's really very sweet, but there are some parts where it was just too sweet for me and I skipped it 'cause it wasn't interesting enough. That's more of a personal flaw than your fault, so ignore me on this one. ~ The emotions do not come across as 'real' sometimes. When her parents die, she almost gets raped, she's cross with Cam - at points it's a little contrived. And there is no way in hell that she could run and run and run... in high heels. "I’ll just grab my purse and then I’ll rush right over there" - this particulary struck me. In a crisis involving your son, is the first thing you say going to be about your purse? No! It's a given that you're going to get your purse. ~ For a 'hundred percent tomboy', she's awfully girly. Although for a girl to not believe that she's pretty when everyone tells her otherwise is not impossible. Still, when have boys that you've only just met called you 'gorgeous'? I have just started a new school, and I know that this doesn't happen. But still, this is fiction, no? Still, can't wait til you update! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Don’t let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game Nice, Cinderella Story. YAY! UPDATE! XxCrossMyHeartxX |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome story! xx |
![]() ![]() ![]() aw, i love this story so much. I hope you update it soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I can't wait for your next update! I hope Kiera beats Andrew like the whiny little baby he is! what a jerk... I love your story, great plot, very well written! UPDATE SOON! |
![]() ![]() ![]() UPDATE! Pretty please! I love your story its good and I only found a few spelling mistakes. Um other that that you just need to make sure you write who's Point of View its in. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i love this story!i can't wait for the nest chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME STORY! Please update soon! I beg of you. tehehe ) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Been reading this for some time now and I finally got to the last chapter. Please do continue writing! I wanna see andrew trashed! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hmm you rambled a little bit here. I sort of skipped the whole dialogue. But the storyline is still very good, im moving on to next chapter now! |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is cute and it's good yay you rock |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this story! Please keep it up... Quickly too.. I love this. ~Angel |