Reviews for All She Had To Do Was Smile |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This was a mostly enjoyable story, with a well developed main character. However, you had some grammar issues that were hard to overlook. More times than I'd care to count, you used 'to' instead of 'too,' 'were' instead of 'was', and 'your' instead of 'you're.' For an entire two chapters (sorry, I don't remember which), you used Cam's last name for Keira. And in just about every chapter, you switched multiple times between past and present tense. Those are just some things to work on, in the future. |
![]() ![]() omg i am so sorry for what i said before! i had the wrong story! but i just know i've read this before somewhere and it's bothering me... but i still |
![]() ![]() hm... i read this story a few days ago on someone else's account... (Jaided was the name by Breejalil) what confuses me is that you started before her, but she finished before you. SOMEone plagerized, and i can't figure out who. T_T just thought you should know even if you've probably got a million notifications about this already. |
![]() ![]() ![]() haha lol, I'm so bad at maths! It wasn' tthe 500th - sorry about that! But is did have a 0 on the end! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw yay. I love secret santa's - don't you? I thought it was really nice how they all pitched in for a gift to give to her. I also just realised that although I have reviewed quite a lot now (like every chapter for the past 3); this one is the 500th! I'm kinda jazzed abt that seeing as how its a momentous thing and I'm the one that gets to do it. So, firstly I'm going to talk about all the good stuff in this. I really appreciate good structure, grammar and spelling in a story. You fluently weave descriptions in and you do it very well. I love all your characters. I think she has great friends, a great genuinely kind and caring boyfriend, wicked brothers (in the good way)and so many more great people to surround herself with. I love the great romantic story cliches and your story has them all; the makeover, the ball, the friends who know the deal, the jerkface, the issues; you have it all; but whats really great is that you write these events in the plot, but you add your own twist to them and make them uniquely yours. Throughout the plot I have been surprised at the sudden twists and turns and can't wait for more This story is really good and I really hope you keep up with your writing and hone your technique till it is even better than now I love how you include all those |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ew what a jerk! I can't believe Andrew would do that..well I guess I can, but stil...I'm so glad that they came in time. When Jake tied him to a tree I would really have liked him to get out a rowan branch or something and whip him...or castrate him...sorry..I feel very passioately about arsehole rapists. ANyway..did not expect that. Can't wait to read the next ones |
![]() ![]() ![]() HAHA SHAME CHRISTY! HE LOVES HER! |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh wow... I'm usually a lurker right until the end of the story; but this was just so touching. I can't believe he died! I'm crying here. So so good... :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow! That's a really good first chapter ;) I like that it's not one of those cliché stories (maybe it will be in later chapters, I don't know) and I really like Keira now. anyway xD I'm supposed to write an up-date myself, but I think I'm gonna continue reading this instead ;) x |
![]() ![]() ![]() lol love this chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh, she has an accent? well i guess i should've seen that one coming considering she's from iowa LOL |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow i think i've fell in love with him already XD great first chapter by the way :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw. this story rocks! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I've just read the whole story in a couple of days! I absolutely love it and Cam is adorable :) I'll now start to read the sequel... :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() omg i know what the present is! Sorry just thought I should let you know because I'm normally really slow and now I feel fast xD |