OK, THAT WAS AMAZING! I found this story by fluke, and I am so glad I did! Gosh that was amazing! I can't believe all that Keirs had to go through! you did a fantastic job and I can not WAIT for the sequel... woah! You did great characterization, you described the surroundings super well and you made it so real! I loved all the characters... especially Cam... duh! And jake *sigh* lol an all around good job! I hope you keep writing and try to publish your work one day...

I totally understand the whole senior thing, I'm going through it too... good luck on everything!

Loved it!

There is nothing I would like more than a sequel to this! I absolutely loved this story! :D

hey it was a great story!

i want to see a story for james or jake or someone.

please?

well unless your continuing the keira/cam story of course!

Oh my gosh... i absolutely loved your story. I usually dont read non fiction but this is what i would call a perfect story for me.. its got swimming( my favorite sport in the world), its got romance, drama & humor & overall its just awesome... it has a perfect balance of everything hot guys & the perfect amount of cliche... and i know i keep repeating myself but it really was awesome and i loved the story, keep it up!

okay so i just started reading this. i like it because it has potential. i totally get where you're coming from [i did read your author's note at the end] that your writing freshman/sophomore year was... eh iffy. mine was as well. so i highly recommend editing.

one thing right off the bat that i noticed was when Cam and Keira introduce themselves, why do they use their full names? I don't think I've ever introduced myself with my middle name...

other than the grammar stuff like 'too' and 'to' that others have pointed out, that's really all i can say about the first chapter. If i were you, I'd try to find a beta who can really go through and pick out all the things that can be tweaked to make this even better.

good luck with all your tests and graduation and have an amazing time at prom!

feel free to check out my profile. My newest story "Interlude" will be up in the next couple of days if you want to check it out.

~E.L.

aw its over :(

the story isn't that good nor it is bad..i mean it is good cause it isn't lame or something but it's not exactly exciting either.. well it's just really unlikely tat everything seems normal except the faCT that she's in an all boy's school.. it'd be better if you know it's very different everyday since her current situation isn't what you'd think of as normal..so that's it..i will be reading more:)

Forget what I said before, I ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT

I'm realy interested into the story, but for me it drags a little. However, I will continue reading.

Hi! This was a great story. yes, there were grammatical, factual, and character gaps, but I like the relationship you created.

In the sequel? Hmm... I'd like to see some personality development. I want to see them growing up, and what that does to Kiera and Cam's relationship, as well as the relationship with her and her brothers. In this story she mentions how much of a tie she has with her family, but that should be shown more. Also, have you thought about making it from a different character's point of view? I don't know what you have planned, but it seems like Kiera's story is kind of finished. But if you've got lots more developments planned, that's great, too. Umm.. that's all I can think of right now, if you have any questions or want an opinion on an idea, feel free to PM me!

I love your story. They are so great together. I am looking forward to a sequel but I hope they stay together and stay strong as a couple and don't have any of that relationship drama.

Hey Ann!

I really love your future plans!

Please continue this wonderful, peaceful story...

I like it that your story is full of everything..

Adam - the bad guy.. a bit action and hate here.. but so full of love

and peace - it's wonderful because all the other stories are so full of tragedy and soap stuff.. ;)

I love your style, your words (even in the beginning) and I would

appreciate it, when you write a sequel in the future!

DA-chen

P.S. Good luck with your tests!

You do realize that 5'5 and 116 lbs means she is under weight right? With an unhealthy BMI? Eww...

I'm 5'4 and 135 lbs, and look much healthier than she would.

If she is a tomboy, she's have at least some musle mass, so I wouldn't put her weight under 120 lbs.

Loved it :)