I am enjoying this story and just wanted to tell you so. I am going to finish reading this story but right now I am enjoying the different relationships you have created.

Thank you so so much for posting this on fp. It's an incredible story, completely indescribable; I don't have your way with words, so I won't even try:P

You wrote this when you were 14!Thats mindboggling! I'm very very impressed. Please, publish it :) I'll buy it, I promise.

This story is by far one of the best on fp, (and out of it too) :)

That was freaking beautiful. I cried my eyes out on the last chapter. I loved every chapter, paragraph, sentence. It was beautifully written and full of fantastic illistrations that I practically devoured. You characters personalities were all unique and genuine and there was a poetic beauty surrounding the whole story. I am in awe. You have a gift, a wonderful gift and I wish you good luck with any and all other stories you make.

Sincerly,

Lena J

i was listening to madonnas "frozen" while reading the last few chapters. i must say that it fits strangely well. it was a combo that made my heart twist. you know this is one of the few stories i have read that makes my heart literaly hurt... twisting sort of... aching... its an interesting feeling... love it but loathe it you know. 3

noooo... not midnight... why why why... i loved him and now he's all under his fathers power and its just painful and and... nooooo... *sob* poor noon...

read it all in 3days loved it

Dusk is such a cry baby! It's unbelievable!

*Bows in respect*

That is all to be done.

This was a great story! So I was shocked to tears when I read chapter 72 and then flipped over to the next chapter to find that is was "the end"! What happened! I as so into the story and it seems like it was a ploy to get our hope up just so they could be crushed! *cries* And what ever happened to the re-write? Didn't you say that this was going to be rewritten?

Wheee, I'm lovin' this story still. :) I feel like Dawn is under some sort of spell... He must be.. I hope!

I love the world this is set in. It's fantastic!

I was confused as FUCK through this entire damn story. Each character had an unoriginal name that made me want to rip their fucking heads off each time. There wasn't nearly nuff lemon, and you switched between POVs way to often to be understandable. And the ideas, machines and almost everything was included in here without anyone explaining what the FUCK they did.

KiiAmat was taken as the diety they worship, but no one said that! All the weapons the two kingdoms used in the beginning were never explained!

All in all this could have been MUCH better had you taken the time to explain things instead of 'Oh here's the jobber-jabber but OH SHIT they're using the jabber-jobber!'

I love this story! Very well written and extremly hot(:

-Desiree (DizzyRayBabe)

"Noon was my responsibility.

Mine." Kyaa! squee! teehee

That was seriously the most (to use outdated slang) epic story I have ever read on fictionpress. If I ever reached the level of writing or creativity you achieved in this story, I would be content as a writer. I'm assuming at least part of what I read was the rewritten version.

It actually reminded me of some of Mercedes Lackey's stuff. Only better. Hope you get better as you wrote that you are generally ill.

~purplehost