|Reviews for Lemon Crème|
| Naomi Hansen chapter 1 . 12/22/2009
You would not believe how hard I laughed when I read "THE LEMON!" I think I almost fell out of my chair. XD
(I'd say more I'm in a hurry now. So Auf Wiedersehen!)
| Minlou chapter 1 . 10/26/2009
Just discovered fictionpress and your story is the first I've read. After reading this I really wish I'd known about the site sooner!
This was wonderful, from beginning to end.
I'd love to read Murashi's p.o.v.
| momochan123 chapter 1 . 10/19/2009
Simply adorable omg i now have a top story X3
| tarryfairy chapter 1 . 9/11/2009
*smiles* That was really cute, and overall very good. The only thing that seemed a little out of place was Kazuhaka's observation that he never saw any other customers but him, because Marushi clearly states that he has customers and obviously he needs them for his business to survive, so it just seemed kind of random and confusing to point that out. But really, that's such a small thing for me to complain about; other than that it was very enjoyable :)
| BluePillow chapter 1 . 7/7/2009
Aww, how sweet
| g0shawk chapter 1 . 7/4/2009
Aw so cute! :)
| A chapter 1 . 6/26/2009
While I was reading, I noticed that there were a few places where punctuation could have been stronger or more exact, but it's nothing that takes immediate precedence.
I just wanted to point out that maybe, in an author's note or something, you might want to explain to your readers when you place your fics in a different country or time frame simply to clear up the cultural and name differences so that people don't end up going, "Murashi... Kazutaka... Hiroue...? Aren't I reading in America?" The only reason I mentioned this is because you might have some readers that don't know the mindset or the know what things are or mean when you use the corresponding words in a different language ("Yen", for example).
I liked the way you wrote this because the main character was developed well and not a 2D, cardboard copy-paste character. I do, however, think you could have incorporated a little more description into your writing as far as delicacy and finesse went. Not necessarily in physical description, but maybe more in the department of emotional wealth (strengths, weaknesses, etc...) just to add a little bit more realism to your writing and to make it a little bit easier for the reader to identify with.
Overall, I'm glad I clicked and I look forward to seeing more works done by you.
Thanks for the read!
| fangluver chapter 1 . 5/20/2009
Oh how sweet...
| ddz008 chapter 1 . 5/14/2009
It made me sigh and smile. It was so sweet! T_T
| Logical and serene megadeath chapter 1 . 1/30/2009
My rabid fangirl wishes to come out now.
I LOVE IT! *squeals*
| sage chapter 1 . 1/2/2009
That was so cute!
| Ikei Sono Nai chapter 1 . 12/21/2008
i love it! lemon is my favorite flavor too! :)
| gumdropspimp chapter 1 . 11/9/2008
It's so cute :D
| Sw33tR0ze chapter 1 . 10/26/2008
Aww! Love it, wish you would write more.
| Poems To The End chapter 1 . 9/18/2008
Thats so cute...love it!