Reviews for chemically unbalanced
realityescapesher chapter 1 . 9/19/2006
i see what you mean about the flow, but i really like some of the lines. i do this sometimes where i rant for a little bit and on the whole it's not coherent but there are pieces of it i like. for example, i really like the beginning statement. i think it's a very powerful beginning. i also love "but her tone always seems to be perfect, like she remarks, but never complains." and "doesn't sit still. doesn't look well." i don't know if this is the form you always write in but personally if you experimented a bit more i think it would make a more powerful piece. just my opinion though, maybe you have your thing and this is how you write. anyway all in all, i'd say it was a productive chem class :)